Please read my song!!?!
Question: Hiyas people! Could you please read my song and tell me what u think?
Shining Star
You shine so bright
[just like the brightest of all stars]
and I wonder how you always know,
[you know about everyone]
especially me
{Chorus} at first I wasn’t sure
who you really were,
even thought I’ve done things I regret
you were still there to see
and you've never once hated me
and you shine so bright (so bright)
it makes me wonder
if I was wrong all along
about who you are
and now I know
that you always care
about (everyone_
nothing will stop me (now_
from seeing you right now_
{chorus}
and your shining so bright
and of all the stars
you’ll never fade (repeat 2x)
you’ll shine forever, forever_, (forever)
lighting all dark paths
so we can all once see again
and you'll help us find the way
Of our heart’s desires
{Chorus}
you'd never leave anyone behind
its like I’ve always known you
from somewhere
you've helped me so much but you won’t be here forever
and someday I’ll have to say goodbye
buSh
Answers: Hiyas people! Could you please read my song and tell me what u think?
Shining Star
You shine so bright
[just like the brightest of all stars]
and I wonder how you always know,
[you know about everyone]
especially me
{Chorus} at first I wasn’t sure
who you really were,
even thought I’ve done things I regret
you were still there to see
and you've never once hated me
and you shine so bright (so bright)
it makes me wonder
if I was wrong all along
about who you are
and now I know
that you always care
about (everyone_
nothing will stop me (now_
from seeing you right now_
{chorus}
and your shining so bright
and of all the stars
you’ll never fade (repeat 2x)
you’ll shine forever, forever_, (forever)
lighting all dark paths
so we can all once see again
and you'll help us find the way
Of our heart’s desires
{Chorus}
you'd never leave anyone behind
its like I’ve always known you
from somewhere
you've helped me so much but you won’t be here forever
and someday I’ll have to say goodbye
buSh
Sounds great! you should sing it then post it ! I would most likely buy it!!
thanks im going to steal that song and use it wahaha
im not gonna lie, i like it!
The format is good. I'm not sure who your subject is, though - a little too obscure with the point of the song. You will probably need to grow into a deeper vocabulary to make the big time. I recommend taking some creative writing classes to unlock the fantasizing, creative you.
If you decide to publish this, run spell check.
Time to share:
Swimming With Daffodils
She works late at Hot Topic
She’s lookin’ kinda mean
Fifty pierces showing
And her blue hair’s fairly clean
Skin tight, holed-out jeans,
Pushed by about two-fitty,
You could be a true Christian
And still say she’s sort of pretty
CHORUS:
And she’s followed her heart, changing her name
To something she really feels
Her mother used to call her Jane,
Now she’s Swimming With Daffodils
She left family in a fight
One bag that she could carry
Did whatever she wanted
Then married military
Freedom was ten times better
Than stares at the exchange
All the neighbors marveled
How she left and didn’t change
CHORUS:
And she’s followed her heart, changing her name
To something she really feels
Her mother used to call her Jane,
Now she’s Swimming With Daffodils
BRIDGE:
Now she finally made her place
In a city that doesn’t mind her
And she’s found her path to faith and grace
Should one day her husband find her
She works late at Hot Topic
She’s lookin’ kinda mean
Sixty pierces showing
Her bright green hair’s fairly clean
Skin tight, holed-out jeans,
Pushed by about three-fitty,
You could be Wiccan just like her
And still say she’s sort of pretty
CHORUS:
And she’s followed her heart, changing her name
To something she really feels
Her mother used to call her Jane,
Now she’s Swimming With Daffodils
And she’s followed her heart, changing her name
To Swimming With Daffodils
Swimming With Daffodils
Swimming With Daffodils
Laughing Dolphin Music 12 February 2008
that is good!!!!! :)