Is this a good verse?!
Question: I am 13, and have been writing for 2 years. What do you think of this.
Here i come with a clean surgical knife/
its BIGD, just trying to bring hip hop back to life/
much love to nas, but hip hop aint dead/
its just flat line, lying in a hospital bed/
we could of all done our part to save it but instead/
we watched it fall, and let all this fake **** spread/
now we're trying to get back to our origanal roots/
and go back in time before it was before who shoots/
first, who laughs last, who will come out on top, winning all their disputes/
now this music aint even rap, its just who disses who/
why all the hate when we all just want the same thing/
to make a name for ourselves, and live out our childhood dreams/
its funny how hip hop dropped so fast/
it seems like just yesterday it was simpily unsurpassed/
its time to take hip hop into our own matter/
its a long way up, so lets start climbing our own ladder/
Answers: I am 13, and have been writing for 2 years. What do you think of this.
Here i come with a clean surgical knife/
its BIGD, just trying to bring hip hop back to life/
much love to nas, but hip hop aint dead/
its just flat line, lying in a hospital bed/
we could of all done our part to save it but instead/
we watched it fall, and let all this fake **** spread/
now we're trying to get back to our origanal roots/
and go back in time before it was before who shoots/
first, who laughs last, who will come out on top, winning all their disputes/
now this music aint even rap, its just who disses who/
why all the hate when we all just want the same thing/
to make a name for ourselves, and live out our childhood dreams/
its funny how hip hop dropped so fast/
it seems like just yesterday it was simpily unsurpassed/
its time to take hip hop into our own matter/
its a long way up, so lets start climbing our own ladder/
if you really are 13 years old... its great.... if you are 16 years old or older... its definately overdone and a bit pushy.. kindaoverwhelming. and hmmm if you are really 13 what do you know about the real years?... no offense that just crossed my mind. but i really erally appreciate the fact that you realize what rap and hip hop has become. at least someone is standing up for hip hop. thanks my man!!!
Not bad for a 13 year old...keep on working kid...
not bad, but i thnk you are overdoin' the rymeing
tryna be a lil white Common. i c u. lol. it was decent.
That was good for a 13 year old. Keep working on it. Your overdoing it a little bit with the rhyming