What do you think about it.......?!


Question:

What do you think about it.......?

this is a song i wrote:

I was sittin on my front porch swing, thinkin bout what you said to me, how I wish i could take lost times back, i'm sorry for the pain i caused you, i wanna make it all better, i wanna be the one you wanna talk to about, in a good way. Forgive me if i overthink the obvious. I love you and truth is I need you in my life, *chourus* don't wanna push you away, cause when I say goodbye i want you to cry because you're sad, ooohhh, I want you to see me the way that i see you. *chorus* I want you to remember me for my good deeds for my caring nature. I don't want you to let me go, but first I gotta show you that, I love you and I need you in my life, I can't say that I don't care if you walk away. Truth is I do and baby i'm gonna show you that I *Chorus* Ohh please let me show you the better me. sittin on my front porch swing thinking about what to do to gain you back.

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1 week ago
please no rude comments like don't quit your day job. Just your opinon and any suggestions that you have to make it better. Thank you so much!

>Zoey<


Answers:

Actually, it's quite good!

Have you tried to put it to music yet? If you ever do, I'd like to hear it.

If writing is something that you want to pursue....I wish you all the luck in the world!

I must kind of warn you though, If you want to get into the songwriting biz, you need to develop a "thick skin" Most people are more eager to tell you when they don't like something, than when they do like something. I am not saying that to discourage you, it is just part of the business.

Take care, and I wish you success.


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