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Question: Rate this! Do you like it!?
This is a poem I wrote in 8th grade & I've been told I should enter it, do you think so!? It's about teenage life and not flipping out over every little thing!. It doesn't have a title yet!.
think not of yesterday
remember not broken promises
show your face with no regrets
your life is a river of endless challenges
these are the days to gather direction
reach for tomorrow
i hold your hand
catching the moment
criticism,please & thank you!Www@Enter-QA@Com
think not of yesterday
remember not broken promises
show your face with no regrets
your life is a river of endless challenges
these are the days to gather direction
reach for tomorrow
i hold your hand
catching the moment
criticism,please & thank you!Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
I find that poem to be great advice!.
Plus it sounds like it's heart felt!. Great Job!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Plus it sounds like it's heart felt!. Great Job!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Its really good!. You should definately submit this to whatever it is!.
No criticism here!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
No criticism here!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
10/10
niceWww@Enter-QA@Com
niceWww@Enter-QA@Com
10/10 amazing
great great great job!Www@Enter-QA@Com
great great great job!Www@Enter-QA@Com
9/10 pretty good!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
That is very good!!! You should some how get it published or submit to a poem website!. Nice!Www@Enter-QA@Com
It's great! Keep up the work! ;DWww@Enter-QA@Com
that's totally freakin awesome!. don't let anyone tell you different!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
That is great, that is definitly a 10!Www@Enter-QA@Com
9/10 Very good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
realli good , great job ?
5 stars !.!.lol *****Www@Enter-QA@Com
5 stars !.!.lol *****Www@Enter-QA@Com
I loved it! Every line evoked some kind of memory or emotion for me!. You know, this poem is absolutely perfect the way you wrote it!. If i were you though, i'd do one thing differently but that's just MY way of thinking!. If you'd like to see, let me show you down below! You can see if you like my idea!. =)
think not of yesterday
remember not broken promises
show your face with no regrets
your life is a river of endless challenges
these are the days to gather direction(God, i love it!)
reach for tomorrow
i hold your hand
catching the moment(When trying to provide criticism, there's one question that pops into my head with this last line!. Catching the moment how!? It's just a suggestion, but i think you could do something with this last line to give a better picture, better imagery!. So, okay, this is MY way of thinking, everyone's is different, and it's off the top of my head but this is a quick example!.!.!.
catching this moment
in a net of possibilities!.
I added five words! Wow! Lol!. You know though, little things DO make a difference!.
And yep, i changed "the" to "this"!. just becuz it's more ME ^_^) If you want to do something more, you do something that's YOU!.
BTW, i'm in 8th grade NOW! =) I have good experience in writing though, and it's my best talent!. ^_^Www@Enter-QA@Com
think not of yesterday
remember not broken promises
show your face with no regrets
your life is a river of endless challenges
these are the days to gather direction(God, i love it!)
reach for tomorrow
i hold your hand
catching the moment(When trying to provide criticism, there's one question that pops into my head with this last line!. Catching the moment how!? It's just a suggestion, but i think you could do something with this last line to give a better picture, better imagery!. So, okay, this is MY way of thinking, everyone's is different, and it's off the top of my head but this is a quick example!.!.!.
catching this moment
in a net of possibilities!.
I added five words! Wow! Lol!. You know though, little things DO make a difference!.
And yep, i changed "the" to "this"!. just becuz it's more ME ^_^) If you want to do something more, you do something that's YOU!.
BTW, i'm in 8th grade NOW! =) I have good experience in writing though, and it's my best talent!. ^_^Www@Enter-QA@Com