Opinions? Summer poem by me?!
Question: Opinions!? Summer poem by me!?
I'm 16!. It's kinda kiddish, but it basically describes what summer means to me!. Opinions!? Be honest!.
-A Senior's Summer-
Waves crashing upon the sand
Walking barefoot hand in hand
Summer moments feel like dreams
Promised bliss and memories
Autumn leaves color the ground
Winter snow keeps me sleeping sound
Spring flowers can brighten a day
Yet only Summer heat keeps worries away
When I am old and weak and grey
I'll look back at the tomorrows of today
My sight may take the best of me
And leave me left to barely see
Those leaves
That snow
The flowers so bright
May all look to me as a dark lonely night
One thing I'm sure
My old age cannot cheat
Is that feeling of warm sand
Below my wrinkled feet <3
-ME-Www@Enter-QA@Com
-A Senior's Summer-
Waves crashing upon the sand
Walking barefoot hand in hand
Summer moments feel like dreams
Promised bliss and memories
Autumn leaves color the ground
Winter snow keeps me sleeping sound
Spring flowers can brighten a day
Yet only Summer heat keeps worries away
When I am old and weak and grey
I'll look back at the tomorrows of today
My sight may take the best of me
And leave me left to barely see
Those leaves
That snow
The flowers so bright
May all look to me as a dark lonely night
One thing I'm sure
My old age cannot cheat
Is that feeling of warm sand
Below my wrinkled feet <3
-ME-Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
I think its really good!!
the line
'Yet only Summer heat keeps worries away'
seems kinda long tho!.!.!.!.!.
but it is really goodWww@Enter-QA@Com
the line
'Yet only Summer heat keeps worries away'
seems kinda long tho!.!.!.!.!.
but it is really goodWww@Enter-QA@Com
uhh , kinda boring and a bit too original
it's not really deep or personal sounding the way i find a real poem should be
but its not bad!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
it's not really deep or personal sounding the way i find a real poem should be
but its not bad!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
As an adult who writes and plays music I must say nice work!.
I like the way you age and still remember the days of old, still feeling the same!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I like the way you age and still remember the days of old, still feeling the same!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
AWESOME!Www@Enter-QA@Com
beautiful! Very detailed and nice use of adjectives!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
yeah it's kiddish, but summer is kiddish, nice rhyme schemeWww@Enter-QA@Com
Very good, you are an aspiring poet!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Wow, that was amazing! I love how concise it is, and how it all ties in at the end!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Thumb me DOWN people I AM ORDERING YOU TO!
You WILL do what I say!Www@Enter-QA@Com
You WILL do what I say!Www@Enter-QA@Com
well you could do some improvements but it's good !Www@Enter-QA@Com
that was pretty good you should write more keep it up enjoyed your poemWww@Enter-QA@Com
coolWww@Enter-QA@Com
i like it!. it flows very wellWww@Enter-QA@Com
i like it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
aww,LOVELY!!
u're really talented,write more! =DWww@Enter-QA@Com
u're really talented,write more! =DWww@Enter-QA@Com