Song I'm working on. What do you think?!
Question: Song I'm working on!. What do you think!?
I see then coming from the hilltops
The ghosts of yesterday
Yeah there's no stopping them
These ghosts just won't go away
I'm dwelling in the past
Before moving to the present
But I notice visions of the future
Are somehow absent
My memories and mistakes
Haunt me to this very day
Yeah those ghosts are coming
Why don't they just go away!?
I went to the cemetery
That rests in my head
I gave it my peace of mind
Still I cannot go to bed
I keep on waking up
To the same old nightmare
I thought my memory was empty
I was sure it was bare
Yeah I try to ignore it
Pretend nothing's wrong
But if that were the case
Why would I write this song!?
They keep tearing and ripping
Split me right in two
They just won't leave me be
I can't forget about you
I can't forget about you
I just can't forget about you
The dawn is here, morning's come
It keeps them at bay
Yet my hope is destroyed
These ghosts haven't gone away
Well!? What do you guys think so far!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
The ghosts of yesterday
Yeah there's no stopping them
These ghosts just won't go away
I'm dwelling in the past
Before moving to the present
But I notice visions of the future
Are somehow absent
My memories and mistakes
Haunt me to this very day
Yeah those ghosts are coming
Why don't they just go away!?
I went to the cemetery
That rests in my head
I gave it my peace of mind
Still I cannot go to bed
I keep on waking up
To the same old nightmare
I thought my memory was empty
I was sure it was bare
Yeah I try to ignore it
Pretend nothing's wrong
But if that were the case
Why would I write this song!?
They keep tearing and ripping
Split me right in two
They just won't leave me be
I can't forget about you
I can't forget about you
I just can't forget about you
The dawn is here, morning's come
It keeps them at bay
Yet my hope is destroyed
These ghosts haven't gone away
Well!? What do you guys think so far!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
I like it!.!.!.I could critique a few things from a poet/writer type point of view so some parts flow a little better, but that'd be something I'd send to you in private and only if you wanted!. I really do like it though!.
Can I post it in a blog and give you credit for it so I can keep it and read it over from time to time when I'm in one of those weird moods!?
As I was reading it I was thinking slower, softer music as well!. Piano would sound amazing!. I wish I could hear it when you finish!.
:)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Can I post it in a blog and give you credit for it so I can keep it and read it over from time to time when I'm in one of those weird moods!?
As I was reading it I was thinking slower, softer music as well!. Piano would sound amazing!. I wish I could hear it when you finish!.
:)Www@Enter-QA@Com
i like it!. :)
the lyrics really say something!.
they have meaning!.
but what's the tempo to the song!?
and what instruments are playing!?
whatever you do with the song, make sure it all fits!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
the lyrics really say something!.
they have meaning!.
but what's the tempo to the song!?
and what instruments are playing!?
whatever you do with the song, make sure it all fits!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Cool!.!.!.pretty deep
Theres a lot about ghosts!.!.
Well, if thats your thing
Its pretty good, but it needs a got beat too
Good luck xxWww@Enter-QA@Com
Theres a lot about ghosts!.!.
Well, if thats your thing
Its pretty good, but it needs a got beat too
Good luck xxWww@Enter-QA@Com