Rate my poem please. Be honest. Tell me if it sucks or not?!
Question: Rate my poem please!. Be honest!. Tell me if it sucks or not!?
As I gaze and see
Blue waters and waves
Of the pools, lakes, rivers, and oceans
In ponds, creeks, and seas
Is somthing we all need
So peaceful and calm
Yet it is the killer of many
It's in the rain that we say is so relaxing and puts us to sleep
But it's also in deadly hurricanes that give us nightmares and keep us awake all night
Yet we need it to survive
So we must live with something that causes us so much pain
But can at times still give us so much joy
Does it help or hurt us more
You decide
Would you rather live miserably without it until you die
Or happily with it until it brings death to you
Love is like blue water and waves
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Blue waters and waves
Of the pools, lakes, rivers, and oceans
In ponds, creeks, and seas
Is somthing we all need
So peaceful and calm
Yet it is the killer of many
It's in the rain that we say is so relaxing and puts us to sleep
But it's also in deadly hurricanes that give us nightmares and keep us awake all night
Yet we need it to survive
So we must live with something that causes us so much pain
But can at times still give us so much joy
Does it help or hurt us more
You decide
Would you rather live miserably without it until you die
Or happily with it until it brings death to you
Love is like blue water and waves
Misleading aren't theyWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
I think it was beautiful, deep,real,and verrry well written,,,,,,I love it, it really says it all!.!.!.!. keep writing!!!!!!!!! really great!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
remember that it is your work & no one can change it!. & that it portrays your feelings, and if you understand it that is all that matters!. however, it is hard to follow in my personal opinion, the lines don't go together very well!. free verse is supposed to be the easiest to write, but it brings on a challenge!. i like the fact that you were comparing love to something to try to make it easier, i just don't think it worked that well!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
It's ok!.
The rhythym is a little off in my opinion, but it tells a great story!.!.!.and there's a lot of truth in it as well :)
Good job!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
The rhythym is a little off in my opinion, but it tells a great story!.!.!.and there's a lot of truth in it as well :)
Good job!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
THIS IS VERY GOOD YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE
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I like it alot!! Very beautifully written!.!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Wow that is really good you should start a writing career!!!Www@Enter-QA@Com
excellentWww@Enter-QA@Com
Great!!!Www@Enter-QA@Com
I like it :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
No, it does not suck!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I like it a lot!. It's really good!. :]Www@Enter-QA@Com
not badWww@Enter-QA@Com
Bravo!.!.!.!.!.!.!.it hurts & gives us great happinnes!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
its alright!.
not my cup of tea though!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
not my cup of tea though!.Www@Enter-QA@Com