Lyrics please tell me anything i can fix?!
Question: please rate and tell me anything i can fix
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Remember the first time
she stared into your eyes
remember it well
she stared into mine
Those were the days
when we could stop and gaze
without cause
without care
those were the days
Remember the first time
she smiled at you
remember it well
that was your cue
Those were the days
when we could stop and gaze
without cause
without care
those were the days
Those were the days
i wished would last
through the haze
i dawned on my past
i cant have any regrets
but i just cant forget
how those were the days
Remember the first time
your lips met to fast
remember it well
for its not the last
Those were the days
when we could stop and gaze
without cause
without care
those were the days
But now its not like that
in this crazy world
we cant stop and gaze
and ive forgotten that girl
Answers: please rate and tell me anything i can fix
Untitled
Remember the first time
she stared into your eyes
remember it well
she stared into mine
Those were the days
when we could stop and gaze
without cause
without care
those were the days
Remember the first time
she smiled at you
remember it well
that was your cue
Those were the days
when we could stop and gaze
without cause
without care
those were the days
Those were the days
i wished would last
through the haze
i dawned on my past
i cant have any regrets
but i just cant forget
how those were the days
Remember the first time
your lips met to fast
remember it well
for its not the last
Those were the days
when we could stop and gaze
without cause
without care
those were the days
But now its not like that
in this crazy world
we cant stop and gaze
and ive forgotten that girl
Wow! I've just got to say that that was absolutely amazing and u should be proud! I really like the lyrics and think they could really work. What kind of music is it that u play and is it fast or slow because if u produce this song then i would really like a listen!
Good work, u r really talented
and if u do make the song can u put it on youtubbe and post me the link because it would be much appreciated!
thanks again!
Pretty good stuff
That's adorable.
I wouldn't change a thing! It comes from the heart.
<3
1 out of 10
lets say 8
That was pretty good
lips met to fast....lips met too fast (you think that might not matter but if your submitting it to someone, spell check it numerous times
wow i wudnt change anything thats really good!
Wow! I love it 10/10!
I think you should call it:
Those Were The Days
I really like it. Don't change a thing. Let me know if you record it because I would love to hear it. If not you should try to sell it unless you've written it for a band/your band. There are loads of places on the internet who would snap up stuff like that in a second I'm sure!
ma be try? that was then, this is now. instead of those were the days. other than that, its very good!!
first it good but now to get the real if wright a pom to her don't say she stared into Ur eyes say when u stared into my eyes i thought u would never leave me say it some like that if it to her now if its a song then u have to do the first part over but is good
if its a song, reduce the length, if you want to keep it this way, name it 'Infinity'(:D).
thats a really good frame for a song,i feel like you havent sucked out the essence from the frame.
make the final product 'intense', like liqour with no chase, leave the listener hanging, let him/her figure out the meaning.
'depth' is the word of the day. for a song or a poem to have depth it doesnt have to contain 'big words'. example :All the nursery rhymes, small words talking about complex political situations. so i hope this was helpfull to you, im a lyricist myself, but honestly, thats a hot frame, really good. :-),keep up your good work.
this song is very good! it's very well written and ya if you are submitting it in.. spell check it.. 'your lips met TOO fast'
the lyrics are amazing and all you have to look at now is whether or not they fit in with the beat!
Good Luck! =D