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Question: **FYI the girls in it are in 7th grade (its based off of real-life experience)**
Jack was spotted in a Dodgers baseball cap waiting outside the valet parking entrance. “Hey,” He smiled as he silently admired Rebecca’s glossy hair. “Wow you look hot!” Rebecca giggled in that flirty way she did that always won the hearts of her
crushes. She reached out her hand and Jack kissed it.
“You don’t look too bad yourself,” she smiled at Jack.
“Well, I mean what can I say? Your not the only person who has style” He continued.
Rebecca replied with a smile and confidently led the way into the Beverly Hills Hotel lobby. She knew exactly where the restaurant was, her dad took her there all the time when she was younger.
A waiter approached with two lunch menus. “I’ll have the House Salad and a Diet Coke,” Rebecca smiled when the waiter pulled out his notepad.
“On a diet?” Jack teased.
TO BE CONTINUED:
What do you think of it so far? What could I do to make it better?
Answers: **FYI the girls in it are in 7th grade (its based off of real-life experience)**
Jack was spotted in a Dodgers baseball cap waiting outside the valet parking entrance. “Hey,” He smiled as he silently admired Rebecca’s glossy hair. “Wow you look hot!” Rebecca giggled in that flirty way she did that always won the hearts of her
crushes. She reached out her hand and Jack kissed it.
“You don’t look too bad yourself,” she smiled at Jack.
“Well, I mean what can I say? Your not the only person who has style” He continued.
Rebecca replied with a smile and confidently led the way into the Beverly Hills Hotel lobby. She knew exactly where the restaurant was, her dad took her there all the time when she was younger.
A waiter approached with two lunch menus. “I’ll have the House Salad and a Diet Coke,” Rebecca smiled when the waiter pulled out his notepad.
“On a diet?” Jack teased.
TO BE CONTINUED:
What do you think of it so far? What could I do to make it better?
9
pretty good
it sounds interresting so far
keep going!
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A 10! That was awesome!