I just wrote a poem? Please tell me what you think of it?!
Question: Im a guy and just wrote a poem about how my mornings are, Please tell me what you think of it (im 12 years old so it may not be so great)
I feel lonely,
I can’t get thoughts of depression out,
I try hard, as hard as I can, until my headaches start,
Then I feel sleepy, I lay on my bed, thinking,
Then I shut down, fall asleep, into my depressing dreams,
I wake up to my alarm, beeping at me,
I can’t remember my dream; I try hard, but not too hard,
I don’t want to get a headache again; they are just too painful,
I pack up and get ready for school, but the headache returns,
I try to take an asprin, but that doesn’t work, it just brings tears,
I leave for school, I see the faces of my classmates, and I smile,
Knowing that here, I am free from headaches,
Free from the pain, then,
I remember my dream.
Answers: Im a guy and just wrote a poem about how my mornings are, Please tell me what you think of it (im 12 years old so it may not be so great)
I feel lonely,
I can’t get thoughts of depression out,
I try hard, as hard as I can, until my headaches start,
Then I feel sleepy, I lay on my bed, thinking,
Then I shut down, fall asleep, into my depressing dreams,
I wake up to my alarm, beeping at me,
I can’t remember my dream; I try hard, but not too hard,
I don’t want to get a headache again; they are just too painful,
I pack up and get ready for school, but the headache returns,
I try to take an asprin, but that doesn’t work, it just brings tears,
I leave for school, I see the faces of my classmates, and I smile,
Knowing that here, I am free from headaches,
Free from the pain, then,
I remember my dream.
aww I'm sorry hun. i know what that's like. i think the poem is great =] especially for a 12 year old, keep it up.
~Megan
wow thats pretty coolio. im a girl and im 12 too. lol im 13 in february
Pretty cool.....
meh...Since you are 12, its somewhat okay...
But its basically, about some dude who gets a headache, and forgets his dream, gets another headache, goes to school and gets all happy again...
6/10 for creativity
Good job.
wow for a 12 yr old that is very good
i like it...
good job...
Kool Job! Nice work! Hey I didn't even look at the age, and I thought it was good.
Then I saw.... 12 YEARS OLD!!??!?!??! lol good job!!!
I really like ur poem i like it when ppl write poems and lyrics I really don't know why maybe because i write poems too
ok i'm just writing now i should stop
its good.
i hope you dont really feel that way though. if you do PLEASE talk to someone. i have a friend who cut herself until i found out (she told me) and i told a counselor. shes mostly all better now, she's getting there. :)