Help with my poem title? Can you think of one?!
Question:
Help with my poem title? Can you think of one?
thanx i dont know what to call it!!!!
It would be nice if this didn’t recur.
I believe that it would be easier,
If emotions never began to stir.
Then things would be, again, as they once were.
My heart, a broken dove, a bloody mess
The scars have tingles of longing feelings
And the band aids itch, begging for caress
My knees give out, I fall into kneeling
Its jagged edges prick me as I breathe
In my exaggeration it’s past fix
I should be more careful as to unsheathe
The protective cover that hides its nicks.
If my pitiful death is coming near,
I’m sure it will be of drowning in tears.
Answers: "Scars Have Tingles"
would make a cool title...you are talking about things not repeating... and well... if a scar is tingling... sounds like its the repeat of an old wound... am I right?
That's my favorite sensory line in your poem.
I love how non-chalant the first line is.... it would be nice if this didn't reoccur! lol as if you are talking about a rainy day or an error in a computer system. We're talking blood, scars , tears and death so it sets up that the speaker has reached a point of bitter humor...laughless humor... almost pained sarcasm. Good stuff here. You may want to re examine some of the meter and flow... read it out loud and see how it reads and that may help... but overall you have some great stuff in here. I know all you wanted was a title but I can't help it!!!!! : ) Skinned Knees Emotions Wow, you seriously need to work on the syllables in each line and revise your poem, big time. You also need to fix up the word choice and edit it.