Help help help I'm wrote a song...can you help?!
Question: Help help help I'm wrote a song!.!.!.can you help!?
Okay, so, I wrote a song and I really need some opinions!. So, if you see anything that should be changed, and just your overall opinion of it, I would love to hear it!.
I’m dancin somewhere between heaven and heartache
I don’t know how much of this I can take
Life is taking unexpected turns
Trying not to get burned
In raising hell
On your doorstep
Waitin for you to see me
You never do
Why do I try
Can’t you see that I
Chorus:
Am needing more than just
A glance in the dark
I need to feel the romance
To see the sparks
I need to be with you
You and I, just us two
I want you, I need you, I love you
Why can’t you love me too
My heart’s in between
Raising hell and amazing grace
How my heart speeds faster
When I see your sweet face
But how I get burned
Watching you and her
It’s alright
I just won’t sleep tonight
I’m needing more than just
A passing glance
You’re eyes have me falling into
Some heartfelt trance
I need your romance
To feel the sparks
I need to be with you
You and I, us two
I want you, I need you, I love you
Why can’t you love me too
So I lay here alone
I turn out the lights
I’ll hold your picture close
And I just won’t sleep tonight
Instrumental Break
(slower)
I need more
Than just a passing glance
I need to let go
From your trance
I want your romance
I need to feel the sparks
To be with you
You and I, us two
Wanting you, needing you, loving you
Why can’t you love me *pause* too
Ooh why can’t you love me too
(speeding back up)
Oh, baby please
My heart is aching
For your touch
To feel your warmth
God I need you so much
Just us two
Please I need you
I want you, I love you
Why can’t you love me too
Oh I love you
(slower…music fading out, vocals stay loud)
Why can’t you love me too
Thank you so much!!Www@Enter-QA@Com
I’m dancin somewhere between heaven and heartache
I don’t know how much of this I can take
Life is taking unexpected turns
Trying not to get burned
In raising hell
On your doorstep
Waitin for you to see me
You never do
Why do I try
Can’t you see that I
Chorus:
Am needing more than just
A glance in the dark
I need to feel the romance
To see the sparks
I need to be with you
You and I, just us two
I want you, I need you, I love you
Why can’t you love me too
My heart’s in between
Raising hell and amazing grace
How my heart speeds faster
When I see your sweet face
But how I get burned
Watching you and her
It’s alright
I just won’t sleep tonight
I’m needing more than just
A passing glance
You’re eyes have me falling into
Some heartfelt trance
I need your romance
To feel the sparks
I need to be with you
You and I, us two
I want you, I need you, I love you
Why can’t you love me too
So I lay here alone
I turn out the lights
I’ll hold your picture close
And I just won’t sleep tonight
Instrumental Break
(slower)
I need more
Than just a passing glance
I need to let go
From your trance
I want your romance
I need to feel the sparks
To be with you
You and I, us two
Wanting you, needing you, loving you
Why can’t you love me *pause* too
Ooh why can’t you love me too
(speeding back up)
Oh, baby please
My heart is aching
For your touch
To feel your warmth
God I need you so much
Just us two
Please I need you
I want you, I love you
Why can’t you love me too
Oh I love you
(slower…music fading out, vocals stay loud)
Why can’t you love me too
Thank you so much!!Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Wow I really like it!. Definitely could see that being a song!. Some really catchy lines!. In the stanza that starts with "My heart's in between", I love the first two lines, but I think the fourth and fifth lines could be better if you want them to match up with the level of the rest of the song, which is really high!. I honestly think this is great, and I am a tough critic on writing!. Www@Enter-QA@Com
This is very heart felt and emotional!.
You have a gift for writing music!.
Im not lying i try writing music sometimes to but im not that amazing!.
you should become a song writer!.
hope this helped answer my quesiton please and thanks!Www@Enter-QA@Com
You have a gift for writing music!.
Im not lying i try writing music sometimes to but im not that amazing!.
you should become a song writer!.
hope this helped answer my quesiton please and thanks!Www@Enter-QA@Com
Pretty good!. I also like how you put the production cues in, such as "speed up" and "music fades out!." Well done!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
omg i love itWww@Enter-QA@Com