Do You Like This Song???? It's Mine :]?!
Question: Do You Like This Song!?!?!?!? It's Mine :]!?
any part of this song used with out my approval!? in anything will be plagiarism [dont steal my song]
ok, so before i go spilling out lyrics, this is what the song is about:
in a twisted way its a love song, meaning that even if your insane there is someone just as crazy that is the perfect match for you!. And i use alot of metaphors so deal with it!. also if you come up with a title let me know ;]
Bright eyes inspired:
V1:
Your thoughts are expired
Your brain's rotting away
You manage to twist everything i say
into a heap of lies to keep your self esteem tip top
God forbid, you let your ego drop
Well your sanity is missing and it's starting to show
Shielding your flowers from the sun cause you don't want them to grow
Watching silhouettes of creatures from your window bay
your out of time your out of luck, nothing that you can say
Bridge type thing:
So wont you shed your skin and start over with me!?
start over with me
It Beets the hell out of giving in, and keeping your words under your teeth
Chorus:
We balance each other out
your going mad and im insane
I'll be there when your knees give out
playing along with your game
V2:
The Clock is striking 13
and my carriage got away
my tongue is tangled up in knots
i cannot find the words to say
Your jacket fits me perfectly,
plenty of room to tie my arms
We'll lay (lie!?) in seperate cells looking ath the same stars
Differnt bridge thing:
I shed my skin
Im just waiting for you, waiting for you
One day we'll look back
and laugh and laugh and laugh
Chorus
Ending Bridge thing:
Your hand in mine,
technically speaking of corse,
our real hand on the basment floor
but our bones lie together forever moreWww@Enter-QA@Com
ok, so before i go spilling out lyrics, this is what the song is about:
in a twisted way its a love song, meaning that even if your insane there is someone just as crazy that is the perfect match for you!. And i use alot of metaphors so deal with it!. also if you come up with a title let me know ;]
Bright eyes inspired:
V1:
Your thoughts are expired
Your brain's rotting away
You manage to twist everything i say
into a heap of lies to keep your self esteem tip top
God forbid, you let your ego drop
Well your sanity is missing and it's starting to show
Shielding your flowers from the sun cause you don't want them to grow
Watching silhouettes of creatures from your window bay
your out of time your out of luck, nothing that you can say
Bridge type thing:
So wont you shed your skin and start over with me!?
start over with me
It Beets the hell out of giving in, and keeping your words under your teeth
Chorus:
We balance each other out
your going mad and im insane
I'll be there when your knees give out
playing along with your game
V2:
The Clock is striking 13
and my carriage got away
my tongue is tangled up in knots
i cannot find the words to say
Your jacket fits me perfectly,
plenty of room to tie my arms
We'll lay (lie!?) in seperate cells looking ath the same stars
Differnt bridge thing:
I shed my skin
Im just waiting for you, waiting for you
One day we'll look back
and laugh and laugh and laugh
Chorus
Ending Bridge thing:
Your hand in mine,
technically speaking of corse,
our real hand on the basment floor
but our bones lie together forever moreWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
i really like it!.!.!. and that's saying a lot -im really really picky when i judge stuff for the literary magazine i help out with
technicality: for lay/lie theres one that is grammatically correct for people laying/lying down!.!.!. but i dont know which one!.!. you can probably figure it out if you google it
- also typo "of course" not 'of corse'!.!.!.
anyway!.!.!. its got that cryptic optimism i like!.!.!. it almost reminds me of the idea of growing old together!.!.!. except its more like growing crazy together!.!. while its got that dark grimness about it!.!. its got that strange sense of optimism sort of !.!.!. the beginning somewhat reminded me of Combat Baby by Metric!.!. hmm i really like it though!.!. id be curious to hear it set to music!.!.!. i feel like the end bridge thing wouldn't be sung but just kind of read at the end!.!.!.!. hmmmm oh i really like this line "It Beats the hell out of giving in, and keeping your words under your teeth" it gives me that 'f*** the world we've got each other' kind of feel!.!.!.
really nice job!.!.!. i guess it doesnt mean much coming from a random person but i really like itWww@Enter-QA@Com
technicality: for lay/lie theres one that is grammatically correct for people laying/lying down!.!.!. but i dont know which one!.!. you can probably figure it out if you google it
- also typo "of course" not 'of corse'!.!.!.
anyway!.!.!. its got that cryptic optimism i like!.!.!. it almost reminds me of the idea of growing old together!.!.!. except its more like growing crazy together!.!. while its got that dark grimness about it!.!. its got that strange sense of optimism sort of !.!.!. the beginning somewhat reminded me of Combat Baby by Metric!.!. hmm i really like it though!.!. id be curious to hear it set to music!.!.!. i feel like the end bridge thing wouldn't be sung but just kind of read at the end!.!.!.!. hmmmm oh i really like this line "It Beats the hell out of giving in, and keeping your words under your teeth" it gives me that 'f*** the world we've got each other' kind of feel!.!.!.
really nice job!.!.!. i guess it doesnt mean much coming from a random person but i really like itWww@Enter-QA@Com
"An Insane Balance" for the title!.(kind of an oxymoron)
Change beets to beats(unless you meant the veggie)
I really like it!
Best WishesWww@Enter-QA@Com
Change beets to beats(unless you meant the veggie)
I really like it!
Best WishesWww@Enter-QA@Com
i like ittt!. Www@Enter-QA@Com
You got me in verse 2!. I suffer from !?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! So it home! Lovely makes me feel special:) It would touch alot of folks!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
i shed my skinWww@Enter-QA@Com
The Clock is striking 13
and my carriage got away
my tongue is tangled up in knots
i cannot find the words to say
Your jacket fits me perfectly,
plenty of room to tie my arms
We'll lay (lie!?) in seperate cells looking ath the same stars
i like Lie better!. has a better sound!.
i love your song and the Title WOULD YOU SHED YOUR SKIN fits it well!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
and my carriage got away
my tongue is tangled up in knots
i cannot find the words to say
Your jacket fits me perfectly,
plenty of room to tie my arms
We'll lay (lie!?) in seperate cells looking ath the same stars
i like Lie better!. has a better sound!.
i love your song and the Title WOULD YOU SHED YOUR SKIN fits it well!.Www@Enter-QA@Com