What do you think of this rap?!
Question: What do you think of this rap!?
I just made it up and so i decided to type it out it not a full rap i can keep addn!. if yu got any advice thn please share!. if yu think its not good thn say tht too my ears are open!.
I pull the trigga
my heart skips a beat
the sweat runs down my face
bang bang
the young ni66a lays there dead
he died for the game
while his old lady copes with the pain
i see the cops come
so i run
down the alley way
its time to pay
my dues
they start to shoot
so i shoot back
bang bang
WHACK!
i get hit and i go down
but i dont go down
without makn a sound
i keep shootn
bang bang
as they shoot back
and i die the same!.
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I pull the trigga
my heart skips a beat
the sweat runs down my face
bang bang
the young ni66a lays there dead
he died for the game
while his old lady copes with the pain
i see the cops come
so i run
down the alley way
its time to pay
my dues
they start to shoot
so i shoot back
bang bang
WHACK!
i get hit and i go down
but i dont go down
without makn a sound
i keep shootn
bang bang
as they shoot back
and i die the same!.
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Answers:
You already said it yourself: "WHACK!"
You need plenty practice!. This is barely a rap, it's more like a poem!. Your rhymes are simplistic and unimaginative, your bars are too short and there is no structure!. If you were to try and rap this over a beat you'd find it wouldn't flow properly at all!. Plus, don't drop the N word for the sake of it, that's just ignorant!. And don't be talking about things you didn't and won't ever do, you're not 50 Cent!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
You need plenty practice!. This is barely a rap, it's more like a poem!. Your rhymes are simplistic and unimaginative, your bars are too short and there is no structure!. If you were to try and rap this over a beat you'd find it wouldn't flow properly at all!. Plus, don't drop the N word for the sake of it, that's just ignorant!. And don't be talking about things you didn't and won't ever do, you're not 50 Cent!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Yo homie I think you can actually be sumfin!. I like dat and it shows da truf of blacks now a days!. How dey be runnin round firin caps and gettin inta deep crap everday!. Ima say you go wit it and find a producer!.!. dun turn out ta be anoda Soula Boy!. Get da lyrics and da beat son!. U need anythin Ima be here fo ya!. Keep writin!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I think it has potential cause sadly that is what happens with so many young guys growing up n the streets, I like it please send me more my boyfriend makes beats for different music!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Why did u have to use the N***** word!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
sniff "smells a lyric thief"
i've heard`parts of this in other songs before!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
i've heard`parts of this in other songs before!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com