Rate my rap verse, tell what you think.?!
Question: Rate my rap verse, tell what you think!.!?
I get inside your Cerebral Cortex, I pull you in like a Vortex
My rhymes are so versatile, they flow like the Nile
I’m the Pharaoh of the rhyme, But I was born in the wrong time
I drop knowledge like bombs on Vietnam
I can cloud your thoughts like a smoke bomb
Building my empire into an imperial power
You country, your nation is what I’ll devour
In this ever changing world anything is possible
Survival is turning into mission impossible
I’ll hit you like a Megalodon, you won’t know what’s going on
Make you disappear into a celestial sphere
Come across emphatically, eliminate you automatically
I am asymptomatic, charismatic, and axiomatic
In rhyming I am knowledgeable, They go together like a concoction
Some of us are infallible, we are all valuable
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My rhymes are so versatile, they flow like the Nile
I’m the Pharaoh of the rhyme, But I was born in the wrong time
I drop knowledge like bombs on Vietnam
I can cloud your thoughts like a smoke bomb
Building my empire into an imperial power
You country, your nation is what I’ll devour
In this ever changing world anything is possible
Survival is turning into mission impossible
I’ll hit you like a Megalodon, you won’t know what’s going on
Make you disappear into a celestial sphere
Come across emphatically, eliminate you automatically
I am asymptomatic, charismatic, and axiomatic
In rhyming I am knowledgeable, They go together like a concoction
Some of us are infallible, we are all valuable
Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
dont listen to these haters!.
you had some weak moments, like rhyming posible to imposible!.!.!.
but you had some good metaphors!.
i do agree with whoever it was that said that some lines are off beat!.!.!.
but that can be fixed with some rewording!.!.!. np
if people tell you your words are to long, thats bull ****!.
in rap, being able to rhyme lots a sylibals is a good thing
you also ended a lil weak!.!.!.
make sure when you rap you end on a very strong point!.
overall 7/10
thats generous!.
work on it and practice and you could be great!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
you had some weak moments, like rhyming posible to imposible!.!.!.
but you had some good metaphors!.
i do agree with whoever it was that said that some lines are off beat!.!.!.
but that can be fixed with some rewording!.!.!. np
if people tell you your words are to long, thats bull ****!.
in rap, being able to rhyme lots a sylibals is a good thing
you also ended a lil weak!.!.!.
make sure when you rap you end on a very strong point!.
overall 7/10
thats generous!.
work on it and practice and you could be great!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Clever intelligent lyrics, but my opinion is try to keep it 'real'!. Write about things that are relevant to you!.!.
(You cant go round saying you are going to devour countries, because you aren't)
There's nothing wrong with 'bigging' yourself up a bit but it has to have a reality to it!.!.
You lost it a bit at the end there , you had a chance to say a lot but ended up saying not a lot really!.
I agree with the person who said you should try not to have the same word in the next sentence!.
But keep at it!! :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
(You cant go round saying you are going to devour countries, because you aren't)
There's nothing wrong with 'bigging' yourself up a bit but it has to have a reality to it!.!.
You lost it a bit at the end there , you had a chance to say a lot but ended up saying not a lot really!.
I agree with the person who said you should try not to have the same word in the next sentence!.
But keep at it!! :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
It's not bad, but you might put the Dictionary down for a bit!. I got the feeling you equate a large vocabulary with MCing!. Don't let the Million Dollar Words be the only skill you incorporate into your rhyme!. You might work on a more complex rhyme scheme, or add storytelling, next time!. Keep working on it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
It seems like you are using a rhyming dictionary!. Remember writing is 50% of the battle, flow and delivery make up for the rest!. So you should have a song or freestyle instead of posting writtens so we can see how you flow!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
"I am asymptomatic, charismatic, and axiomatic"--------WTF
this is not a rap its like a english poem!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.1>u have no bad words !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. 2>after reading the poem or "rap" u dont get the topic 3>its just heavy rhyming english!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.u suck!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
this is not a rap its like a english poem!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.1>u have no bad words !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. 2>after reading the poem or "rap" u dont get the topic 3>its just heavy rhyming english!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.u suck!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
you sound like a nerd wit all those big words go back to "mathematics" lol and shove that celestial sphere up yur *** i can barely say those words while im tryna get yur flow
sorry to hate but lose the huge wordsWww@Enter-QA@Com
sorry to hate but lose the huge wordsWww@Enter-QA@Com
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8/10 i dont know why these people are hatin, maybe theyre jealous!. but i think your rap is good and has very good metaphors, keep workin!. ;)Www@Enter-QA@Com
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8, Some of the beats don't go together!. Try not to use the same word in the next line, "Bomb"Www@Enter-QA@Com
Wow, people here love to hate, it's not even funny!.
It wasn't that bad, just need a little work on the flowWww@Enter-QA@Com
It wasn't that bad, just need a little work on the flowWww@Enter-QA@Com
Its F****N S**TWww@Enter-QA@Com
I think its pretty cool, Maybe use some shorter words!Www@Enter-QA@Com
I don't care
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its just a whole bunch of fake rhymes!.!.!.but it will be better if u change it abit!.!.!.nice thoWww@Enter-QA@Com
more word play half of the **** dosent make senseWww@Enter-QA@Com
you could do betterWww@Enter-QA@Com
this is great!.Www@Enter-QA@Com