Tell me what you think of my lyrics.?!
Question: Tell me what you think of my lyrics!.!?
THOSE YEARS
By: Paul DeWitt Goree ?2008 PDG Las Vegas Nevada
It was from a moment in the darkness evening
In my mind, where I could turn back time
I went walking through the night, in this sinister city
With out a prize on my mind
There was a man standing near, in a jaguar shade
With the bluest ember in his eyes
His spirit sent me the warmest affection
The illusion was known…
Chorus -
Those years in the past
Those years amassed the essence of a dream come true
Like a memory withholding, Like a spirit slaved by reason
Emotion broke out inside so alive
I was a criminal, with the finest intent
Not a guilty thought murmur from an endowing crowd
Not a hero in disguised with some unknowing motive
I was living letting minutes escape affection
The best years of my life - Those Years
It wasn’t long before my mind went drifting
Some place lucid in a richer scene…
Compounded thoughts of elated visions streamed a circular view
Immune and enchanted by the mystic arrangements
I was flying in a water color dream
Those days I was feeling, rarely simple like Life Magic began
Chorus
Those years in the past
Those years amassed the essence of a dream come true
Like a memory withholding, Like a spirit slaved by reason
Emotion broke out inside so alive
I was a criminal, with the finest intent
Not a guilty thought murmur from an endowing crowd
Not a hero in disguised with some unknowing motive
I was living letting minutes escape
The best years of my
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By: Paul DeWitt Goree ?2008 PDG Las Vegas Nevada
It was from a moment in the darkness evening
In my mind, where I could turn back time
I went walking through the night, in this sinister city
With out a prize on my mind
There was a man standing near, in a jaguar shade
With the bluest ember in his eyes
His spirit sent me the warmest affection
The illusion was known…
Chorus -
Those years in the past
Those years amassed the essence of a dream come true
Like a memory withholding, Like a spirit slaved by reason
Emotion broke out inside so alive
I was a criminal, with the finest intent
Not a guilty thought murmur from an endowing crowd
Not a hero in disguised with some unknowing motive
I was living letting minutes escape affection
The best years of my life - Those Years
It wasn’t long before my mind went drifting
Some place lucid in a richer scene…
Compounded thoughts of elated visions streamed a circular view
Immune and enchanted by the mystic arrangements
I was flying in a water color dream
Those days I was feeling, rarely simple like Life Magic began
Chorus
Those years in the past
Those years amassed the essence of a dream come true
Like a memory withholding, Like a spirit slaved by reason
Emotion broke out inside so alive
I was a criminal, with the finest intent
Not a guilty thought murmur from an endowing crowd
Not a hero in disguised with some unknowing motive
I was living letting minutes escape
The best years of my
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Answers:
It is written pretty well but in my opinion but i would worry about fitting some of these lines along with music!. It would maybe make a better poem than a song but that is only my opinion!. Writing lyrics for music is much more difficult than most people think!. Sometimes the most simple lyrics ie!.!.!.!.without too much description etc are the best, maybe because they are more easily understood and connect with the listener immediately without having to listen the track over and over again to understand its message or story!. Anyway goodluck with your writing and I wish you success!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Not bad!. I'd like to hear the music that goes with this however!.Www@Enter-QA@Com