Help with my song?stars appreciated and giving 10 points?!
Question: Help with my song!?stars appreciated and giving 10 points!?
this is my song so far it isnt done yet but i want your opinion and any ideas will be loved!.
bear with me i wrote it in like 10 minutes!.
Title: Perfection
Verse1:
Your eyes are strong
but a stair would kill
O how you've changed
You make me ill
Verse 2:
You do all this
So how cant they see
You tore them in two
You did it to me
Chorus:
PERFECTION!
It doesnt exist
PERFECTION!
You are not it
PERFECTION!
it's one gib lie
you make me wish
you would just die
thats all i go so far any ideas and feedback welcome Www@Enter-QA@Com
bear with me i wrote it in like 10 minutes!.
Title: Perfection
Verse1:
Your eyes are strong
but a stair would kill
O how you've changed
You make me ill
Verse 2:
You do all this
So how cant they see
You tore them in two
You did it to me
Chorus:
PERFECTION!
It doesnt exist
PERFECTION!
You are not it
PERFECTION!
it's one gib lie
you make me wish
you would just die
thats all i go so far any ideas and feedback welcome Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
A bit cheesy for my tastes, but I have no idea what the accompaniment sounds like, so maybe it would be better with that, but the whole "you make me ill, I wish you would die" thing is to much!.
You don't have to rhyme!.
But something good could come out of it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
You don't have to rhyme!.
But something good could come out of it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
what kind of song is it cause it could go a hole bunch of different ways
put a beat over it i cant give an opinion without one
the chorus just flatout sucks it has potential though
begging for stars!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
put a beat over it i cant give an opinion without one
the chorus just flatout sucks it has potential though
begging for stars!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
Your not reliable in any sort of way,
You think your so cool!.
But there's a problem when you play!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
You think your so cool!.
But there's a problem when you play!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Its pretty good!. You always have room 4 improvmentWww@Enter-QA@Com
its good for you to only have 10 minutes to write and its better than other songs these daysWww@Enter-QA@Com
i like it!.!.
way better that anything i could doWww@Enter-QA@Com
way better that anything i could doWww@Enter-QA@Com