What do you think of this rhyme ?!

so last night i put out a few bars of this and people liked it so i wrote some more so tell me what you think about it and for the beat i'm writing this to the bars sound better short

what do you know about
the hustle the struggle
the grams the fam
the pain the scars
doin life behind bars
the lies the deception
the cocaine resurrection
the constant meditation
the self deprivation
the natural medication
the unconditional dedication
the hating the waiting
watching your life fading
the money from the blood
the gun thrown in the mud
the good the evil
putting in work
for the people
the death of a friend
the biting of the hand
the knowledge the learning
the needle the burning
the academics the lessons
the burden the blessings
the heroin the crack
the 19 year old that died of a heart attack
the money the green back
the moving of a h pack
the d the bundle
the poor the humble
the flame the spoon
the spinning the room
the screams the tears
when one of your homies disappears
the funeral the casket
the glock made of plastic
the revenge the right
the cringe the fight
the wasted the years
the scared the fears
the cop the criminal
the reason is minimal
not just sayin forget it
but staying committed
the pain of hunger
the mistakes of the younger
the man down under
the thoughts the wonder
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