Rate this song i wrote the other day!
Question: Rate this song i wrote the other day
its a letter im writin to a girl who is not tha same as me, didnt grow up tha same way i did or do the things i've done!. we takin interests in each other but she doesnt know whether she should get with a guy like me!. well anyway, here it is!. (haven't named it yet, suggestions!?)
i know a ni99a like me just aint yo type
i kno u cant be my wife
but at least give tha benefit of tha doubt for one second
if not ill teach u, just stay for one lesson
I came up in tha ruined side of town
where ni99as rob corner stores and the boys in blue hike us down
when we get home our mothers discipline, strike us down
wanna kick out tha house cause she sick of fightin now
so coming of age for us is just tryna make it
keeping pistols tucked inside our jeans for jackers wanna strip us naked
take everything ya got, money, kicks, phone or watch
dont try me cause if I spot em then they know they shot
tha only pops i saw was cereal boxes
cause he wasn't there to feed me knowledge
support or gimme dollars
no income, so i had to make profit
standin slangin yay from mornin till i see tha clock hit
midnight, then moms cryin, its a daily cycle
even when u get bruised up, u just gotta fight thru
and hopefully ya obstacles will fall face flat
so accept me as i am, its different but face that
so what do you think!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
i know a ni99a like me just aint yo type
i kno u cant be my wife
but at least give tha benefit of tha doubt for one second
if not ill teach u, just stay for one lesson
I came up in tha ruined side of town
where ni99as rob corner stores and the boys in blue hike us down
when we get home our mothers discipline, strike us down
wanna kick out tha house cause she sick of fightin now
so coming of age for us is just tryna make it
keeping pistols tucked inside our jeans for jackers wanna strip us naked
take everything ya got, money, kicks, phone or watch
dont try me cause if I spot em then they know they shot
tha only pops i saw was cereal boxes
cause he wasn't there to feed me knowledge
support or gimme dollars
no income, so i had to make profit
standin slangin yay from mornin till i see tha clock hit
midnight, then moms cryin, its a daily cycle
even when u get bruised up, u just gotta fight thru
and hopefully ya obstacles will fall face flat
so accept me as i am, its different but face that
so what do you think!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
i loved it!! :) thats wuzupWww@Enter-QA@Com
Nice, its way better then that crap most of these idiots say!. You picked a topic that isn't totally overused 9/10! I wanna see more of this, your going in my contacts!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
10/10 i like it!. i would take out the ni99a because i think this is a very good song that doesn't need cursingWww@Enter-QA@Com
Not too shabby!. No nursery rhyming here!. A couple of the lines may be too long for flow, but good overall!. Write a hook son!Www@Enter-QA@Com
yo cat that was honestly tight - rep ya clickWww@Enter-QA@Com
yo bruh that **** be tightWww@Enter-QA@Com
whoa i can see that as a single!. real deep! 10Www@Enter-QA@Com
=] ten for ten!.!. hahahah
That was awesome, And I'm sorry!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
That was awesome, And I'm sorry!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
lol!.!.!.buddy that don't rhyme too good!.!.!.
and your grammar needs to be worked on!.!.!.
and that cannot be copyrighted because you have to get approved with the proper punctuation and grammar usage!.!.!.seeing not capitals, no ending punctuation and an improper use of spelling you cannot get approved!.!.!.
maybe you should try something short and simple!.!.!.such as!.!.!.
"My name is Phil and I'm awfully cool,
You're so fat you'll break a stool"
hope I helped you through your ruff time buddy!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
and your grammar needs to be worked on!.!.!.
and that cannot be copyrighted because you have to get approved with the proper punctuation and grammar usage!.!.!.seeing not capitals, no ending punctuation and an improper use of spelling you cannot get approved!.!.!.
maybe you should try something short and simple!.!.!.such as!.!.!.
"My name is Phil and I'm awfully cool,
You're so fat you'll break a stool"
hope I helped you through your ruff time buddy!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com