Please tell me; do you like my lyrics?!


Question: Please tell me; do you like my lyrics!?
Hey, I am an aspiring lyricist and this is my first song!. It is a little short but I am proud of it and I believe it has the originality people are looking for!. It is a rap song!. Tell me what you think of it, and be nice!

Yo, yo, uh uh, that's right!.
Yo, I'sa be talking, white trash niiggger!.
Yo, yo, uh, yea!.

Yea, baby, yo, don't you wanna be with me!.
Uh, that's right, yea!.

CHORUS:
yo, can someone help me!?
Yo, yo!. I don't know!. uh, uh huh!. yea!.

Yo, yo!.!.!.yo, yo!. Uhhhhh!. Baby!!
What now!? Be there!. yo, yo, yo!.

CHORUS: 2x

Baby, baby!. What you think!.
Ohhh!. That's right, baby!. Yo, yo!.

Yo, yo, yo, yo!.!.!.that's right



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Answers:
i just counted and there are like, 35 "yo"'s, "uh"'s and "yea"'s!.

now compare that to about 39 real words which are in the song!.

i'm going to assume it sounds better with music and an actual rhythm, but the lyrics arent that great!. they dont say much!. you could get the same point across a hell of a lot faster by just saying:

thats right, I be talking white trash ******!.
baby, dont you want to be with me!?
thats right!.
can someone help me!? i dont know!.
Baby! What now!? Be there!.
Baby, baby!. What you think!.
Thats right baby, thats right!.


And ya know why!? Its because those are the only real lyrics in the song! If you just read those lyrics, what do you think!? cause those are the only real ones you managed to come up with!


this answer may be a bit biased because i cant stand rap music!. but honestly, if you're going to write lyrics, make them say something deep! Try writing some poetry first to inspire the song!. Then put it to music!. I think you'll be pleasantly surprised!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

Ummmmm these are lyrics!?

Look up the definition for lyric!.!.!. this doesnt qualify:


lyr·ic

1!. (of poetry) having the form and musical quality of a song, and esp!. the character of a songlike outpouring of the poet's own thoughts and feelings, as distinguished from epic and dramatic poetry!.
2!. pertaining to or writing lyric poetry: a lyric poet!.
3!. characterized by or expressing spontaneous, direct feeling: a lyric song; lyric writing!.
4!. pertaining to, rendered by, or employing singing!.
5!. (of a voice) relatively light of volume and modest in range: a lyric soprano!.
6!. pertaining, adapted, or sung to the lyre, or composing poems to be sung to the lyre: ancient Greek lyric odes!.
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idk!.!.!.
there's a bad word in the first paragraph!.!.!.
and the song is basically made up of "yo"!.!.!.
It's not rly about something, usully rap has a meaning to it!.!.!.
like, what's he saying!? s he waving to his girlfriend and being like "yo, baby" or something!?

I don't understand it!.
U gotta be seriouS!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

Honestly, I think it's stupid!. Way to many yo's, plus it makes no sense what is the true meaning behind it!? Are you trying have the one hit song or something, if so least put originality in the song not yo yo baby yo baby Www@Enter-QA@Com

It's kind of hard to read the lyrics without knowing the rhythm or beat of the song, but umm!.!.!.!.!. I honestly don't think they're very good!. Www@Enter-QA@Com

Gonna name it the Yo-Yo song!?
a little less Yo's and might do just fineWww@Enter-QA@Com

it's!.!.!.interesting!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

aw thats really cuutteeWww@Enter-QA@Com

Talk about guns and welfare and you will have a hit!. Www@Enter-QA@Com

It says "Yo" and "Uh" too much over and over againWww@Enter-QA@Com

God spare the world from this idiot!. Www@Enter-QA@Com

Soulja Boy's latest smash hit!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

Get a new hobbyWww@Enter-QA@Com

its ok

id go easy on all the yo's thoughWww@Enter-QA@Com

yea there r cool dudeWww@Enter-QA@Com

thanks for the 2 points

btw grow upWww@Enter-QA@Com



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