What do you think of my lyrics/poetry? :]!
Question: What do you think of my lyrics/poetry!? :]
Yes, It's allot of reading!. But please, take the time to read!. I'm fourteen years young!. And I have A dream!. Help it come true!. also, Tell me what I'm doing wrong!.
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This one's called; Happy Birthday!.
They still call me, But don't ask to hang out!.
Is it them who are blocking me out, or am I just blind to the fact that i'm blocking every one out, am i blind!.
I been playin games, all my life!. They just keep gettin harder, to win!.
Im moving away from this town, like ive wanted to for years!.
but honestly if you told me you still cared, I'd turn this car around, And beg my dad to let me stay here with you!.
I feel like writing to you but im not sure what i would say!.
I keep telling myself to think before I talk to you!. But whatever I say, Wont come out the way i hope for it to!.
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This one's called; A song for you!.
I'm trying to get them out of the circle, but they keep on fighting back!.
I'm much to weak, I'm much to down!.
So i'll drink this sad song out of my soul!.
I wanna leave this ******** town!. And I want to be just like you, but i cant take the drugs you do!.
the only thing I remember about you is the way you hurt me!.
that pain was so good!.
I try to tell you every thing i love about you!.
but i dont try to hard!. cause im a beginer, at chasing boys like you!.
your still so young boy, and I know you got alot of learnin!.
but you start, why dont you start giving a **** cuz all I wanna do is be next to you!.
and now i see a new side a life, but only twelve more years to waist!.
then its time to be a big girl!.
gotta get my life strait!.
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this one is called; SCENE 3!
its hard to remember what we lost when we never gain it back!.
and you cant forget things you just dont know!.
your cryin for nothin!.
trying to find some one you can love!.
now i got some one to kiss i need you to love me!.hold me and ah ah ah ah
baby come home i need you to wake up again i havent been feeling so trapped lately but i still i know i am!.
dont hurt yourself your just a kid!.
I met a guy i really like him!.
And I told him I was wondering if maybe he would like hanging out with the pool tonight!.
we can laugh and kiss!. we can swim!.
it wont be what you expect but it will be fun!.
nah nah im sure you will enjoy it!.
we can sit and talk as hours go by!.
we can go under a shady tree!.
i wont wisper songs to you!.
not yet, not now, not ever!.
we can chill!. i wont rush you if you dont rush me!.
i dont feel any different than i did yesterday!.
but i should!. it sticks to me like maybe a worm should stick to the tree!.
out side under the beautiful colorado sky!.
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this one is called; get yourself back to where you were yesterday
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he insist we talk but not like that cause hes got a girl!.
shes so sweet like i'll never be!.
but now he's left her!.
oh wait you forgot to see me at my best!.
your becoming what i became!.
and that is not a good thing!.
become what im becoming!Www@Enter-QA@Com
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This one's called; Happy Birthday!.
They still call me, But don't ask to hang out!.
Is it them who are blocking me out, or am I just blind to the fact that i'm blocking every one out, am i blind!.
I been playin games, all my life!. They just keep gettin harder, to win!.
Im moving away from this town, like ive wanted to for years!.
but honestly if you told me you still cared, I'd turn this car around, And beg my dad to let me stay here with you!.
I feel like writing to you but im not sure what i would say!.
I keep telling myself to think before I talk to you!. But whatever I say, Wont come out the way i hope for it to!.
--------------------------------------!.!.!.
This one's called; A song for you!.
I'm trying to get them out of the circle, but they keep on fighting back!.
I'm much to weak, I'm much to down!.
So i'll drink this sad song out of my soul!.
I wanna leave this ******** town!. And I want to be just like you, but i cant take the drugs you do!.
the only thing I remember about you is the way you hurt me!.
that pain was so good!.
I try to tell you every thing i love about you!.
but i dont try to hard!. cause im a beginer, at chasing boys like you!.
your still so young boy, and I know you got alot of learnin!.
but you start, why dont you start giving a **** cuz all I wanna do is be next to you!.
and now i see a new side a life, but only twelve more years to waist!.
then its time to be a big girl!.
gotta get my life strait!.
--------------------------------------!.!.!.
this one is called; SCENE 3!
its hard to remember what we lost when we never gain it back!.
and you cant forget things you just dont know!.
your cryin for nothin!.
trying to find some one you can love!.
now i got some one to kiss i need you to love me!.hold me and ah ah ah ah
baby come home i need you to wake up again i havent been feeling so trapped lately but i still i know i am!.
dont hurt yourself your just a kid!.
I met a guy i really like him!.
And I told him I was wondering if maybe he would like hanging out with the pool tonight!.
we can laugh and kiss!. we can swim!.
it wont be what you expect but it will be fun!.
nah nah im sure you will enjoy it!.
we can sit and talk as hours go by!.
we can go under a shady tree!.
i wont wisper songs to you!.
not yet, not now, not ever!.
we can chill!. i wont rush you if you dont rush me!.
i dont feel any different than i did yesterday!.
but i should!. it sticks to me like maybe a worm should stick to the tree!.
out side under the beautiful colorado sky!.
--------------------------------------!.!.!.
this one is called; get yourself back to where you were yesterday
!.
he insist we talk but not like that cause hes got a girl!.
shes so sweet like i'll never be!.
but now he's left her!.
oh wait you forgot to see me at my best!.
your becoming what i became!.
and that is not a good thing!.
become what im becoming!Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Yeah, I think I'd refer to it as poetry because I cant detect any real kind of structured verse or chorus that would lend itself to the rhythm or cadence of any kind of song, and that may be just limitations that I'm putting on it due to the kind of music that I listen to!.
I do however think that you are most definitely a very talented young writer! Your verses are extremely colorful and vivid in their descriptiveness of your feelings and observation!. I applaud you on a job well done and by all means keep it up! PEACE:)Www@Enter-QA@Com
I do however think that you are most definitely a very talented young writer! Your verses are extremely colorful and vivid in their descriptiveness of your feelings and observation!. I applaud you on a job well done and by all means keep it up! PEACE:)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Very heartfelt!. it tells your story very trulyWww@Enter-QA@Com
NiceWww@Enter-QA@Com
i wish i had the style to exhibit my early writings to people!.!. i wish i was awake to the resources, to my inner muses when i was your age!. I wish!.!.for you to follow your dream!.!.i wish for you to know within your heart by reaching for the light, cuz that is the only way you will find truth in what you do!. also, use exhilerating and vivid and fascinating adjectives!. And, always, be true to yourself! Be uniquely yourself!Www@Enter-QA@Com