I wrote this song??!


Question: I wrote this song!?!?
I wrote this song last night, I wanted to know if you guys thought it was OK!. It's a country song!.!.!. here are the lyrics, I'm 14 and this is my first song, so if you have any comments or changes, tell me! thanks!! Oh, also, it's a somewhat slow song, but the chorus is very up beat and angry!.

~A song for Ali~

“It all started when I was real young, it paved the path for the rest of my life
You were never there for me, you were always far too busy
Making you proud was the hardest thing, don’t think I ever did
And I prayed to God, every night, that someday all of this would change”
That’s what she said…

So where were you when she needed you most
Why did you leave her all alone
Was it right to leave her in the dust, resist her love and watch her fall
And forget, that love is all your daughter really needs!.
She’s just an innocent girl, but without you
How is she gonna make it in this world!?

Did you know that she cries, every night, she never got that kiss goodbye
Oh, her life is so empty, just look at what you’ve done
When she wakes up every morning, oh she can’t see the sun
And I pray to God, every night, someday she will change her life
And be happy…

So where were you when she needed you most
Why did you leave her all alone
Was it right to leave her in the dust, resist her love and watch her fall
And forget, that love is all your daughter really needs!.
She’s just an innocent girl, but without you
How is she gonna make it in this world!?


I don’t want to see her suffer, I want her to smile
I know, that deep down inside, she’s that little girl who needs her mom
Please there for her and give her a hug…

But where were you when she needed you most
Why did you leave her all alone
Was it right to leave her in the dust, resist her love and watch her fall
And forget, that love is all your daughter really needs!.
She’s just an innocent girl, but without you
How is she gonna make it!.!.!

Oh where were you when she needed you most
Why did you leave her all alone
Was it right to leave her in the dust, resist her love and watch her fall
And forget, that love is all your daughter really needs!.
She’s just an innocent girl, but without you
How is she gonna make it in this world!?

One more thing!.!.!. this song, is about a girl named ali, at my school!. Her parents are never there for her, they leave her home with a nanny, and that has affected who she is and how she acts and it's all very sad!.!.!.

but please be REALLY honest!!?
Thanks so much for answering! I really appreciate all of your answers, criticisms and improvement ideas

Lastly, it doesn't rhyme, I know!. That was not my focus and this song was not meant to rhyme, so yea!. lol!.
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Answers:
Amazing,you got it going on,in one night,someday you'll look back,and see how great you are,just never give up!.You Have TALENT young lady!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

Really good! I tried to write a song and it was horrible, it was also really shortWww@Enter-QA@Com

Wow girl, that's awesome! Yeah, not all songs need to rhyme !.!.!. I would love to hear someone sing that song!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

Blessings of Growth,knowledge,safety,stardom!. Go for yours show then how GOD has Blessed YOU!.!.!.Btw are you Erica!?!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Blessings YahooWww@Enter-QA@Com

sounds really good! It dosent bother me that it dosent rhyme much, it dosent need to!. You might want to work on the lines having a similar pattern but other than that ti sound amazing!!Www@Enter-QA@Com

wow~!~ I hope you can sing real good becasue you could be a star!Www@Enter-QA@Com

That is amazin!! I think you have a life of soon writin a head of u you're gonna make it big if u keep this upWww@Enter-QA@Com

That is really goodWww@Enter-QA@Com

wow! you're really good!. (: that's so sweet to write a song for her! you should show it to her!. (:
songs don't have to rhyme! most of mine don't but some do!.
and that's funny, i write songs at night most of the time, too! (:
but it's usually at like 2 am lmao!. like when i'm not tired and i just can't stop thinking about something!.
you got talent! (:
keep writing songs and posting them, i'd love to read them! :D
<3, Rachael!. (:Www@Enter-QA@Com



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