Judge this raps i wrote yesterday OUT OF 10 plz?!
Question: Judge this raps i wrote yesterday OUT OF 10 plz!?
im royality in rap i reign over others mcs
im completely different to rappers like range rovers and GMCS
im hot as hell and ill never ever freeze
so yo you kno i wont ever listen to the police
oh pleez ill make them get down on my knees
ill open the way and never rust like old keys
home is my pen and paper and bars are my homies
kno this you cant see me and through shades ull shatter like oakleys
if youre impressed then dont be
youll be tested once you realize that next to me your bars look like a monkeys
youl try to dance to your own drum but youre playing to wrong keys
youll look so dumb trying to cop a battle from me
but then look funny when im done and your head is a donkeys
im a don so my bars come with such ease
im hot and fly by you like a warm breeze
all you other mcs just piss me off like a dog flees
tricking yourslef into a battle like hoochies!.
aiight wel thats it!. judge plz be honest thanks!. im not tying to be famous just rap for fun with my friends!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
im completely different to rappers like range rovers and GMCS
im hot as hell and ill never ever freeze
so yo you kno i wont ever listen to the police
oh pleez ill make them get down on my knees
ill open the way and never rust like old keys
home is my pen and paper and bars are my homies
kno this you cant see me and through shades ull shatter like oakleys
if youre impressed then dont be
youll be tested once you realize that next to me your bars look like a monkeys
youl try to dance to your own drum but youre playing to wrong keys
youll look so dumb trying to cop a battle from me
but then look funny when im done and your head is a donkeys
im a don so my bars come with such ease
im hot and fly by you like a warm breeze
all you other mcs just piss me off like a dog flees
tricking yourslef into a battle like hoochies!.
aiight wel thats it!. judge plz be honest thanks!. im not tying to be famous just rap for fun with my friends!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
to be completely honest!.!.!.you sound like your trying to be someone your not!. you say "i won't ever listen to the police" and then say that you'll make them get down on THEIR knees!. if your not a SERIOUS gangsta (i!.e!. done a long bid, have mad street cred, ect!.) then don't try to sound like one, people will know!. if you've lived a "non-gangsta" life that's fine, just speak about what you've seen!.
also, the rhymes are rather basic, try to mix up the rhyme scheme!. here's an example of what i mean:
"first of all, don't make me burst and brawl
image is nothin, you're frontin, i see the thirst in ya'll"
-sean p
overall i'd give it a 5/10, but that doesn't mean it's bad!. it just needs revision!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
also, the rhymes are rather basic, try to mix up the rhyme scheme!. here's an example of what i mean:
"first of all, don't make me burst and brawl
image is nothin, you're frontin, i see the thirst in ya'll"
-sean p
overall i'd give it a 5/10, but that doesn't mean it's bad!. it just needs revision!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
LMAO
Good to see your tackling current affairs and not rapping about mindless rubbish!.!.!.11!.5/10!!Www@Enter-QA@Com
Good to see your tackling current affairs and not rapping about mindless rubbish!.!.!.11!.5/10!!Www@Enter-QA@Com
REALLY GOOD WORK
I'LL GIVE U 7!.5 / 10
U COULD CREATE A MYSPACE MUSIC PROFILE
AND ADD YOUR SONGS
THAT WAY WE COULD JUDGE U BETTER
BUT GOOD WORK ANYWAY
KEEP IT UPWww@Enter-QA@Com
I'LL GIVE U 7!.5 / 10
U COULD CREATE A MYSPACE MUSIC PROFILE
AND ADD YOUR SONGS
THAT WAY WE COULD JUDGE U BETTER
BUT GOOD WORK ANYWAY
KEEP IT UPWww@Enter-QA@Com
Not the worst I've heard but def needs a lot of work!. But nuthin wrong with jus rappin for the hell of it!. 5/10Www@Enter-QA@Com
I Fink Itz Gd I Id Giv It 8/10 (Y)Www@Enter-QA@Com
nice lyrics!.!.its pretty cool!.!.i think you could write good rap songs!Www@Enter-QA@Com