Rate my rap #3?!
Question: Rate my rap #3!?
The devil deliver me depression, drama all the time
Thats i spit and do this my music, freein up my mind
Like Huey Freeman, these Gangstalicious rappers gotta go
No Boondocks, this aint people want out of their boombox
Stereos, computers, what happened to all the true sh!t!?
Im killin for rap's life, im the victim and the shooter
Poppin at intruders, change tha hearts of our fans
No Chris Jagger, im tryna be the game's Mick Jagger
Flow's out of the atmosphere, neighbor to Mars and Saturn
Not tryna change the pattern but just tryna establish
Let me elaborate, real ni99as let us collaborate
Like Jay-Z and Coldplay, if not its o!.k
Cause your not really hot unless u can survive the cold days
Trials, tribulations, hard to find elation
If you can relate, then give me affirmation
(i got more but imma stop there cuz im tired)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Thats i spit and do this my music, freein up my mind
Like Huey Freeman, these Gangstalicious rappers gotta go
No Boondocks, this aint people want out of their boombox
Stereos, computers, what happened to all the true sh!t!?
Im killin for rap's life, im the victim and the shooter
Poppin at intruders, change tha hearts of our fans
No Chris Jagger, im tryna be the game's Mick Jagger
Flow's out of the atmosphere, neighbor to Mars and Saturn
Not tryna change the pattern but just tryna establish
Let me elaborate, real ni99as let us collaborate
Like Jay-Z and Coldplay, if not its o!.k
Cause your not really hot unless u can survive the cold days
Trials, tribulations, hard to find elation
If you can relate, then give me affirmation
(i got more but imma stop there cuz im tired)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
yo this was a good concept!.!. but some of the lines didn't rhyme!.!.
Like Huey Freeman, these Gangstalicious rappers gotta go
No Boondocks, this aint people want out of their boombox
Stereos, computers, what happened to all the true sh!t!?
Im killin for rap's life, im the victim and the shooter
Poppin at intruders, change tha hearts of our fans
Not tryna change the pattern but just tryna establish
Let me elaborate, real ni99as let us collaborateWww@Enter-QA@Com
Like Huey Freeman, these Gangstalicious rappers gotta go
No Boondocks, this aint people want out of their boombox
Stereos, computers, what happened to all the true sh!t!?
Im killin for rap's life, im the victim and the shooter
Poppin at intruders, change tha hearts of our fans
Not tryna change the pattern but just tryna establish
Let me elaborate, real ni99as let us collaborateWww@Enter-QA@Com
i couldnt really catch the flow unless u gimme the beat u wrote it to!. overall the lyrics aint bad!.
"No chris jagger, im tryna be the games Mic Jagger" is a pretty weak line!.
metaphors are alright overall ill give it a 6-7/10!. i usually write and change words and lines all the time so if u work on this it can be pretty good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
"No chris jagger, im tryna be the games Mic Jagger" is a pretty weak line!.
metaphors are alright overall ill give it a 6-7/10!. i usually write and change words and lines all the time so if u work on this it can be pretty good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
pretty nice some rhymes were awkwerd but in all thats a good logical rap GJ keep on keeping on with it!Www@Enter-QA@Com
if 5 mics = a classic track, then your only about 4!.99 mics off!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
it's a freestyle @ freedie, quit pmsin
its peace!.!.!.!.work harderWww@Enter-QA@Com
its peace!.!.!.!.work harderWww@Enter-QA@Com
damn freddie fox, you need to turn ur AC up and sit an chill cause u sound a lil to hot!.
hes just askin people what the think of his music, and this is the rap an hip hop fourm and he can ask ANYTHING realated to the subject!.!.!.!.if your so worried about it write yahoo or make a petition lol
but yea your stuff was alight, in the begining it had no rythm it wasent flowin right but near the end or second half it started to flow and go togeather, but again like a previous poster id have to hear how you spit it out insted of me just reading it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
hes just askin people what the think of his music, and this is the rap an hip hop fourm and he can ask ANYTHING realated to the subject!.!.!.!.if your so worried about it write yahoo or make a petition lol
but yea your stuff was alight, in the begining it had no rythm it wasent flowin right but near the end or second half it started to flow and go togeather, but again like a previous poster id have to hear how you spit it out insted of me just reading it!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
This is ridciulous! Why do people put rhymes on here hoping that somebody is gonna "read" what they wrote and make them the next "star"!. If you dont know that this is music, and no one can judge you and your "freestlyle" or "song", or whatever other nonsense you come up with and make a repectable decision about your talent!. If this were a poetry forum then by all means put your garbage on here!. Otherwise you obviously are very young and ignorant, to the fact that this is the "rap and hip hop" thread, not def poetry jam! There is so much more to this than just being able to put words together in a rhyme!. In all honesty its my fault for clicking on the question so I take the blame!. To the original poster, dont take it personal, you aren't the first, and won't be the last!. Whats worse than putting a question like this up is the morons who sit there and judge your work like they have a clue!.
co!. 614whatever: How did that sound to you!? I didnt hear anything!? Maybe I have a problem with my speakers though, and should turn my a/c off to give it another tryWww@Enter-QA@Com
co!. 614whatever: How did that sound to you!? I didnt hear anything!? Maybe I have a problem with my speakers though, and should turn my a/c off to give it another tryWww@Enter-QA@Com