Lyrics i wrote. what do you think?!
Question: Lyrics i wrote!. what do you think!?
ok i just started this!. there is very little!. if you would like to add a few lines or even a verse or chorus suggestion i'm totally up for it!. i am a punk/alternative rocker!.
-drain my head of impurities
-take me back to the clarity
-where every word was inspiring
-and every song held so much hidden meaning
-the days so long, and the nights so bright
-don't let them pass us by
chorus
-roxie, won't you dance for me
-smile cause your seventeen
-never been kissed
-only ever been this
-pretty little girl with a fire in her feet
-whose hazel eyes lit a fire deep in me
-roxie, won't you dance for me!?
the 1st verse isn't even finished!. please give opinions and suggestions if you have any!. :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
-drain my head of impurities
-take me back to the clarity
-where every word was inspiring
-and every song held so much hidden meaning
-the days so long, and the nights so bright
-don't let them pass us by
chorus
-roxie, won't you dance for me
-smile cause your seventeen
-never been kissed
-only ever been this
-pretty little girl with a fire in her feet
-whose hazel eyes lit a fire deep in me
-roxie, won't you dance for me!?
the 1st verse isn't even finished!. please give opinions and suggestions if you have any!. :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
I don't think the chorus goes with the rest of the song!. But i love the other part!. You are a great writer!. It is very catchy!. So i would just change the chorus!. II may be wrong to go with your gut!. Hope i helped!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I like it [:Www@Enter-QA@Com
It seems nice!.Www@Enter-QA@Com