Lyrical Review?!
Question: Lyrical Review!?
I wrote this kinda quickly, so bear with me and give an honest opinion
No I dont spit fire, prefer the colder side of things
Not concerned with cars, clothes hoes, or ya bling
People think they on fire, then Im an ice beam
You can call me Articuno, but thats the wrong theme
Cause Im not Red Blue or Yellow, Im ahead of that time
Futuristic, like a transformer, call me Optimus Prime
But Im more like Megatron, terrorizing the rhyme
The swagger confusing em, cause Im an enigma
But I dont make riddles, not Edward Nygma
My identity hidden like Batman, but I aint Bruce Wayne
Live like mortal kombat, people call me Sub-Zero
But im more like Smoke, archetypal anti-hero
Stay reserved, but cross that line and I go ballistic
like a missile, straight savage, almost animalistic
like a bronco, but Im not from Denver
Not Jay Cutler, but in B-More im the quarterback
More like the coach, orchestrating a rout
40 characters left, but Imma take a time-out!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
No I dont spit fire, prefer the colder side of things
Not concerned with cars, clothes hoes, or ya bling
People think they on fire, then Im an ice beam
You can call me Articuno, but thats the wrong theme
Cause Im not Red Blue or Yellow, Im ahead of that time
Futuristic, like a transformer, call me Optimus Prime
But Im more like Megatron, terrorizing the rhyme
The swagger confusing em, cause Im an enigma
But I dont make riddles, not Edward Nygma
My identity hidden like Batman, but I aint Bruce Wayne
Live like mortal kombat, people call me Sub-Zero
But im more like Smoke, archetypal anti-hero
Stay reserved, but cross that line and I go ballistic
like a missile, straight savage, almost animalistic
like a bronco, but Im not from Denver
Not Jay Cutler, but in B-More im the quarterback
More like the coach, orchestrating a rout
40 characters left, but Imma take a time-out!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
It would have been good if you didn't have the transformers, batman, and pokemon references in there!.
3/10!. Unless you were going for the Nerdcore style ->
http://en!.wikipedia!.org/wiki/NerdcoreWww@Enter-QA@Com
3/10!. Unless you were going for the Nerdcore style ->
http://en!.wikipedia!.org/wiki/NerdcoreWww@Enter-QA@Com
"But im more like Smoke, archetypal anti-hero" -everything after that was trash!.
I could hear Pharell producing the beat for it because of its wordplay and futuristic flow until everything after that line!. Good job tho!. Dont be satisfied because you are finished!. Be finished when you are satisified!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I could hear Pharell producing the beat for it because of its wordplay and futuristic flow until everything after that line!. Good job tho!. Dont be satisfied because you are finished!. Be finished when you are satisified!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I liked it okay!. If you want some constructive criticism, you should work on your transition lines!. Rhyme scheme was a tad choppy as well!. Overall I give it a 6/10!. Keep it up and don't let haters getcha down!Www@Enter-QA@Com
9/10 you did really good my friend
PLEASE EVERYBODY RATE MY RHYME!!!!
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PLEASE EVERYBODY RATE MY RHYME!!!!
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
say man i'm diggen it, but i will say that as it goes on it seems to drag but i'd give it a seven outta ten!. you need to find a beagWww@Enter-QA@Com
at least your not trying to ball out or thug out so thats good!. seems like you was un focused just rhyming stuff!. a lot of call me this but im not that going on and at times sh!t wasnt connecting right!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
**** tight but I feel like you trying to rhyme to much u almost sound like a wack luda no disrespect just being honest leave out some of the similes and just flowWww@Enter-QA@Com
You suck!. Rap sucks!. The genre sucks!. You all suck!. Get a life!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
good!. a bit immature but pretty good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
potentialWww@Enter-QA@Com
the cartoon things ruined it but it was still goodWww@Enter-QA@Com
YOURE NOT GOING TO BE A RAP STAR!. GET A JOB!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Pretty sweet, you could murk, Gay-Z any day =D!.
Keep it up!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Keep it up!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Woo! Pretty good!. I give it a 7/10!.Www@Enter-QA@Com