Rate My Rap (Just wrote it in like 10 mins)?!


Question: Rate My Rap (Just wrote it in like 10 mins)!?
Thanks RHH!

I used to trap everyday, like I was a spider web!.
Movin' bricks, hitting licks, keepin' track on n****'s tabs!.
Now that I got big, these Motha f***ers think I fell off!.
Just b/c I don't talk 'caine no mo' don't mean I f***ing went soft!.
I'm still strapped like Jeezy, AK's and semi-autos!.
If my bullets miss ya you lucky n****!.
Like you f***ing won the lotto!.
T-Virus in my blood, yeah call me Nemesis!.
Only things I run from blue lights and feminists!.
I'm not the best alive, I know this- I'm definate!.
But neither is Lil' Wayne, he's not even relevant!.
Inside cigarillo, outside mary jane!.
Chevy's paint so wet, cover da whole f***ing street in stains!.
It's still Young Joey that's the way it's gon' stay!.
I'm out this *****, yeah call it Carlito's Way!.Www@Enter-QA@Com


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Not Bad

Best Part
But neither is Lil' Wayne, he's not even relevant!.

Most Original Part
T-Virus in my blood, yeah call me Nemesis!.
Only things I run from blue lights and feminists!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

lol there you go again D C M but ur right this time this ish was bad lol stop cussin so much wen u dont gota!. instead of all that cussin send a message

o yeah and dont say the n word wen ur white i dont say it no1 els duz if theyre white especially not post it on the net lolWww@Enter-QA@Com

"keepin' track on n****'s tabs"

Aint you white!?Www@Enter-QA@Com

Your rap is crap

like the way i busted that rhyme

It wasnt that bad I mean I didnt die or anythingWww@Enter-QA@Com

its pretty good actually!.!.!.!.i like it!.!.!.good job!.!.!.lolWww@Enter-QA@Com

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it didn't capture my interest!.!.!.!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

Yeaahh pretty damn good for fivee minsWww@Enter-QA@Com

That was the boooooombWww@Enter-QA@Com

man enough about killin and all that, what happened to rappers with a positive message!?Www@Enter-QA@Com

i like it, you've got talent!. 8/10Www@Enter-QA@Com

ehh not horrible!.!.!.
dont get what the subject isWww@Enter-QA@Com

^E-thug lmao
But uh!.!.!.I'm not going to even rate that!.!.!.i mean!.!.!.no!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

check out mine-
what what yea yea who dis ho!?
what yo name yea holla dem hoes!.gotta crank dat up!.what!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

For five minutes it is about a 5 but I wouldn't go around saying n*gga if you aren't black!. I'm not saying your not b/c you might be, but your avatar is white!.

EDIT: Ha you are white! Naw there is no 'im using it lyrically' you can't say n*gga!.!.!. you can't say it! B/c you used it and you are white you get a 0/10!. Have you heard Em saying it!? Nope, because he'd get shot up!. It's disprespectful, frankly i think it is too when Fat ugly obese Joe says itWww@Enter-QA@Com

Wow!. I'm confused here!. I don't know whether to laugh my azz off or actually be offended!. But here's my thoughts on the whole thing:

Rate My Rap (Just wrote it in like 10 mins)!?

*(*(*(The fact that you have to tell us that you just wrote it in 10 minutes already makes it very clear that you're not confident in it, and that must mean it isn't good!.!.!.)*)*)*)

Thanks RHH!
(*(*(*(You're welcome*)*)*)


I used to trap everyday, like I was a spider web!.
Movin' bricks, hitting licks, keepin' track on n****'s tabs!.

(*(*(*(In the first line you tell something unbelieveable!. We obviously aren't going to buy that you "trap" everday, or that that's even the slang of your community!. The spiderweb thing is aiight!. Obviously, you've never moved bricks, hit licks and you can't say n*gga*)*)*)

Now that I got big, these Motha f***ers think I fell off!.
Just b/c I don't talk 'caine no mo' don't mean I f***ing went soft!.

(*(*(*(You aren't big, so that sounds stupid!. And why would people think you fell off if you supposedly just got big!? Believe me, they'd know you aint fall off!. Seriously, nobody will believe your story about "caine," and they wont even believe you actually talk like that!. Thirdy, the way you used your syllables here shows that that wouldn't be on beat if you rapped it!.*)*)*)

I'm still strapped like Jeezy, AK's and semi-autos!.
If my bullets miss ya you lucky n****!.
Like you f***ing won the lotto!.

(*(*(*(Again, nobody would buy that!. You have to be at least kind of real in your rap!. You can't be so out of your realm!. And you shouldn't exaggerate!. Okay, you can say you had a gun but why only assault rifles!? The lotto thing was okay, but honestly, what made you think it was okay for anyone white to EVER say n*gga!?! Incase you really didn't know, nobody would respect you in the rap game for that, you shouldn't want to say it, you should know what it means for a white man to say it, you should act more like you how really would act and you know you wouldn't say that to black people so why do it in an online rap!?! That just makes you a joke*)*)*)

T-Virus in my blood, yeah call me Nemesis!.
Only things I run from blue lights and feminists!.

(*(*(*(I thought the first line here was weak and very whiteboyish!. also, what's this whole running from feminists thing!? That's also lame and sounds very much like it was the only rhyming word you could think of so you just used it!.*)*)*)

I'm not the best alive, I know this- I'm definate!.
But neither is Lil' Wayne, he's not even relevant!.

(*(*(*(This bar would have been alright but you ruined it with the whole, "I'm definate," thing!. That was a lame thing to say and it doesn't make that much sense!.*)*)*)

Inside cigarillo, outside mary jane!.
Chevy's paint so wet, cover da whole f***ing street in stains!.

(*(*(*(Wait, what!? INSIDE cigarello!?! What do you mean!?! The inside of your blunt should always be weed, and the OUTSIDE should be your roll up - cigarello, Backwood if you were smarter, what ever you like!.!.!.!. but I guess you just made a mistake and it would have been alright but you used too many syllables in the second line so you will probably be off beat when rapping this and the line wasn't strong enough to pull that off*)*)*)

It's still Young Joey that's the way it's gon' stay!.
I'm out this *****, yeah call it Carlito's Way
(*(*(*(The Carlito's Way thing was corny!. If you were going to say Carlito's Way in your rap, you shouldn't have wasted it on such an easy, weak thing to say!.*)*)*)

Yeah, you get a !.000000004 out of 10!.Www@Enter-QA@Com



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