Do I have Talent in the rap game?!
Question: Do I have Talent in the rap game!?
Ok so im startin to rap heres sumthin i wrote yesterday, tell me what you think of it and what Im doin wrong and how to improve
Here I come Fresh off the streets
Got some Nice Lyrics on some crazy *** beats
I'm new to the game but I don't take defeats
Smoother than a Bentley with them alligator seats
Cuz I ride, I ride, I ride all day
Don't get into the game Game unless you ready to play
Get out my way
I got money to make
Get out my way
If you phony and fake
If U dont get out my way then thats ur mistake
For goodness sake
can sumone stop me
With the rymes i spit i got the right to be cocky
Knock me down i get right back up like rocky
Nothin can stop me
Im hot like 300 degreez
My rymes are so sick you might catch the disease
And my flwo is ice Cold, dont be surprised if you freeze
***** Please
Try and match me I'm a beast
I eat these other rappers like a feast
Reppin the east
Till I die
I gotta stay High
Blowin bud wit different colors like a shirt wit tie die
I'm a fly guyWww@Enter-QA@Com
Here I come Fresh off the streets
Got some Nice Lyrics on some crazy *** beats
I'm new to the game but I don't take defeats
Smoother than a Bentley with them alligator seats
Cuz I ride, I ride, I ride all day
Don't get into the game Game unless you ready to play
Get out my way
I got money to make
Get out my way
If you phony and fake
If U dont get out my way then thats ur mistake
For goodness sake
can sumone stop me
With the rymes i spit i got the right to be cocky
Knock me down i get right back up like rocky
Nothin can stop me
Im hot like 300 degreez
My rymes are so sick you might catch the disease
And my flwo is ice Cold, dont be surprised if you freeze
***** Please
Try and match me I'm a beast
I eat these other rappers like a feast
Reppin the east
Till I die
I gotta stay High
Blowin bud wit different colors like a shirt wit tie die
I'm a fly guyWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Not trying to be mean, but first you shouldn't ever have to ask if you are talented!.
Second, you aren't saying anything different from anyone else out there in "the game"!. Seriously, you have to be a poet in order to make good rhymes!. Anyone that takes pride in their poems can produce a good track with the help of another talented musician!.
I have a hard time believing your street cred, just for the simple fact that everyone has to prove they are from the hood!. If you aren't from the hood, don't fake it!. Write about the burbs, and I'm serious! If you are from the hood, take a look at how Tupac spoke about his life, and the lives of those around him!. Tupac was a true poet!. Biggie had similar traits, yet the two can not be compared!. Biggie had a very recognizable sound!. So much so, that you can hearnew tracks that are being produced today, and say without a doubt, "this would have been a biggie track if he were still here!"
also, why would you ever say something like "I eat these other rappers like a feast" when lil wayne said , "Feed me rappers or feed me beats"!?
You have to be more creative!. If you are going to "spit" the same rhymes as everyone else!.!.!. then you have to have a different sound!. For example, a different voice, or killer beats!. And I mean a beat that without lyrics could get a room jumpin!.
I hope you didn't take offense!. I'm just adding constructive criticism!. Don't stop what you're doing!. Just try to lyrically set yourself apart from everyone!. Maybe instead of writing about yourself and how "tough" and "talented" you are, you could go the route of Kanye West or Neyo who wrote stuff for people long before people knew who they were! Just a suggestion!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Second, you aren't saying anything different from anyone else out there in "the game"!. Seriously, you have to be a poet in order to make good rhymes!. Anyone that takes pride in their poems can produce a good track with the help of another talented musician!.
I have a hard time believing your street cred, just for the simple fact that everyone has to prove they are from the hood!. If you aren't from the hood, don't fake it!. Write about the burbs, and I'm serious! If you are from the hood, take a look at how Tupac spoke about his life, and the lives of those around him!. Tupac was a true poet!. Biggie had similar traits, yet the two can not be compared!. Biggie had a very recognizable sound!. So much so, that you can hearnew tracks that are being produced today, and say without a doubt, "this would have been a biggie track if he were still here!"
also, why would you ever say something like "I eat these other rappers like a feast" when lil wayne said , "Feed me rappers or feed me beats"!?
You have to be more creative!. If you are going to "spit" the same rhymes as everyone else!.!.!. then you have to have a different sound!. For example, a different voice, or killer beats!. And I mean a beat that without lyrics could get a room jumpin!.
I hope you didn't take offense!. I'm just adding constructive criticism!. Don't stop what you're doing!. Just try to lyrically set yourself apart from everyone!. Maybe instead of writing about yourself and how "tough" and "talented" you are, you could go the route of Kanye West or Neyo who wrote stuff for people long before people knew who they were! Just a suggestion!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
No, your swagger is all wrong!.
Even if you New to this Rap Sh*t we love you can't let people know you a Rookie, you suppose to rhyme like you been by the side of God before man was made!.
Not that look at me I'm new, look I got something Look!. Cause ain't nothing new under this Star that shines on us called the SUN!!!
and stop Name and Lp Dropping come with your own Slang!
From BrookNam's Flyest
Peace!Www@Enter-QA@Com
Even if you New to this Rap Sh*t we love you can't let people know you a Rookie, you suppose to rhyme like you been by the side of God before man was made!.
Not that look at me I'm new, look I got something Look!. Cause ain't nothing new under this Star that shines on us called the SUN!!!
and stop Name and Lp Dropping come with your own Slang!
From BrookNam's Flyest
Peace!Www@Enter-QA@Com
You don't have the rhymes to go four in a row!. So don't!. And to answer your questionWww@Enter-QA@Com
ha ha!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Weak!.
You could be a ghost writer for Diddy though!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
You could be a ghost writer for Diddy though!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
you wasted your time typing thisWww@Enter-QA@Com
eh!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
fresh off the streets!?Then why ur on yahoo answers!?
u said it best 'can sumone stop me' please yes someone stop himWww@Enter-QA@Com
u said it best 'can sumone stop me' please yes someone stop himWww@Enter-QA@Com
it was some lines in there that really turned me off like the tie die reference and the fact that you want other rappers to catch your "disease" when your not that sick!. you need to work on your rhymes a little bit before you can be "cocky"!. and what's up w/ the Game reference!? I hope your not trying to stir up some type of east coast vs!. west coast beef because that is really played out and people are starting to be more interested in the actual craft rather than beef or battling!. I'm not trying to go hard or anything because it was better than a lot of other stuff i heard all i'm saying is work on it and always improve yourself even when you are the best!.Www@Enter-QA@Com