Some feedback on these lyrics please?!
Question: Some feedback on these lyrics please!?
This is a song I'm working on!. Please give me your interpretation and let me know how you like them!. Thanks!
Thin white line
So deceiving
Playing make believe
That everything's alright
My thin white line
Masquerading
And saying baby, I'll get you through the night
Lend my your cold and hollow broken heart
I've got the perfect poison
To tear your world apart
Thin white lineWww@Enter-QA@Com
Thin white line
So deceiving
Playing make believe
That everything's alright
My thin white line
Masquerading
And saying baby, I'll get you through the night
Lend my your cold and hollow broken heart
I've got the perfect poison
To tear your world apart
Thin white lineWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
its sounds like a poem more than a song -- i know poems are made into songs but this doesnt seem really like its a songWww@Enter-QA@Com
its good but try to have a rhyme scheme and make it more catchy but other than that its brilliantWww@Enter-QA@Com
I think they're pretty cool!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
what kind of music is it!?!?
like country r&b!?!?!?Www@Enter-QA@Com
like country r&b!?!?!?Www@Enter-QA@Com