Song Writing!?!


Question: Song Writing!!?
My friend is writing a song and here are some of the lyrics, I cant explain the tune but it goes really well with the song, and her guitar, (keep in mind shes only 12 so no harsh words please)

Thanks!


We keep running, from the things we've done, and im running from what we've beocome cause' you kept changing the way it was going because it was going wrong, But you know its gunna end someday, but when the sun turns grey, ill have you, and thats right, i need you!.

(Chorus) Boy Its gunna be our day! Were gunna run away and play!. No need for change! Were just gunna gunna gunna run awayyyy! Cause' its areeeee day!.



You said the sky is always grey, when I say its always blue, when im with youu!. You says it grey when im gone, and it lights up like its dawn, when im with you, and you can see me too, do you see who I am!? Through this High light, its all cause of you (Ooooh youuu) Because you know its true!.Www@Enter-QA@Com


Answers:
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Good Start, but the lyrics wander around expressing a lot of thoughts, but not in an easy to follow "story" for lack of a better term or an easy to understand succession of thoughts!. It's also very hard to judge without hearing the chords or the tempo of the song to make suggestions on how it may be re-written to be more easily understood by someone who may feel the same way and could really relate to your song (for instance your audience) I can't tell you how many songs I've written that remain unfinished because I'm still re-writing lyrics ! GOOD LUCK and PEACE!!Www@Enter-QA@Com



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