I wrote this song when I was upset, Do these lyrics sound alright? Song called: !
Question: I wrote this song when I was upset, Do these lyrics sound alright!? Song called: Burn my Soul!?
Everything you said to me
Everything you ever did for me
was nothing more then a disguise to hide your hate
Your twisted puzzle's inside left for me to discover
that I was never more then a piece of the game
I Would have burned my soul for you
I would have given everything up for you
Still you showed me your true disguise in the end,
I know the real you now, You cant jog my mind with your deceit ANYMORE!
I hid my feelings for so long from you
now I know it was for good reason
You told me I should open up to you and when I did you turned your back
I tried to get away but I kept holding myself back hoping you would change
You never changed, People never change
I Would have burned my soul for you
I would have given everything up for you
Still you showed me your true disguise in the end,
I know the real you now, You cant jog my mind with your deceit ANYMORE!
I finally see this is coming to a closure,
Your no longer my torment,
Dont stop me now
say goodbyeWww@Enter-QA@Com
Everything you ever did for me
was nothing more then a disguise to hide your hate
Your twisted puzzle's inside left for me to discover
that I was never more then a piece of the game
I Would have burned my soul for you
I would have given everything up for you
Still you showed me your true disguise in the end,
I know the real you now, You cant jog my mind with your deceit ANYMORE!
I hid my feelings for so long from you
now I know it was for good reason
You told me I should open up to you and when I did you turned your back
I tried to get away but I kept holding myself back hoping you would change
You never changed, People never change
I Would have burned my soul for you
I would have given everything up for you
Still you showed me your true disguise in the end,
I know the real you now, You cant jog my mind with your deceit ANYMORE!
I finally see this is coming to a closure,
Your no longer my torment,
Dont stop me now
say goodbyeWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Wow!.
That was really deep, but at the same time, I really, really liked it!. I guess I could sorta relate to this song!. It explains exactly what I'm feeling at this moment!.
And I do agree with the others!. You should go into song writing!. :]
I'm starting to write a few of my own, but they're no way as good as this one!. Haha!. ;]Www@Enter-QA@Com
That was really deep, but at the same time, I really, really liked it!. I guess I could sorta relate to this song!. It explains exactly what I'm feeling at this moment!.
And I do agree with the others!. You should go into song writing!. :]
I'm starting to write a few of my own, but they're no way as good as this one!. Haha!. ;]Www@Enter-QA@Com
its VERY good, and a little say but that would be a great song to record, mayb someday i will here it on the radio!! :) lolWww@Enter-QA@Com
I think its really good and you could probably going into song writing when your older!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I like it, especially the part about the puzzle!. The rhythm seems to be a bit "bumpy" in places, but if you have a fixed melody in your head, there's no need to worry about it!. also, it seems as though your hook falls a little short!.
Apart from a few grammatical errors (which I won't talk about because songs are meant to be heard, not read) and a couple of places where a new line should have been started (like at the end of the chorus), it's really good!.
Keep up the good work :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Apart from a few grammatical errors (which I won't talk about because songs are meant to be heard, not read) and a couple of places where a new line should have been started (like at the end of the chorus), it's really good!.
Keep up the good work :)Www@Enter-QA@Com