How can I improve these lines?!
Question: How can I improve these lines!?
Not too hot
Not too cold
I need a girl to fill my soul
Thats all I have so far :S
Please rate out of 10!. Go as hard as you can because im 15 years old meaning I got a lot of time to improve on itWww@Enter-QA@Com
Not too cold
I need a girl to fill my soul
Thats all I have so far :S
Please rate out of 10!. Go as hard as you can because im 15 years old meaning I got a lot of time to improve on itWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
the 1st 2 linez dont go with the 3rd, so those 2 arnt gud!. But the third one iz gud, but dont use that 2 start the song, put in sunwhere in a verseWww@Enter-QA@Com
not going to rate a work in progress, but I think it would be better if you started with "I need a girl to fill my soul" and skipped the first two lines!. Your soul being filled is what the song is about that's why I say the first two lines detract!. Try to decide what you actually mean by not too hot or cold and maybe put the meaning of those things more directly!. Just my opinion tho!. Good luck!.!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
with 10 being the highest!?
3!.
like its alright but its kind of boring!.
sorry!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
3!.
like its alright but its kind of boring!.
sorry!.Www@Enter-QA@Com