I wrote this song can you give me your honest opinion?!
Question: I wrote this song can you give me your honest opinion!?
i want this guy, can't you see
how much he means to me
and i can't get him hard as i try
but my feelings for him will never die
i just wish i could have to fate
to take him out on a date
so i will pray to the man above
to spend one night will the boy i love
chorus:
your the one who gives me light
who i think about all night
the reason i get up in the morning
but now your leaving without warning
i don't know what i will do with out you here
probably shed a tear
it's gonna make part of my heart dissapear
his beauty is so painful
i think i am in love with an angel
hes perfect in every way
i could stare at him all day
chorus
i wanna pour my soul out to him
even if i gotta go out on a limb
hes my true love
the one sent from the sky above
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how much he means to me
and i can't get him hard as i try
but my feelings for him will never die
i just wish i could have to fate
to take him out on a date
so i will pray to the man above
to spend one night will the boy i love
chorus:
your the one who gives me light
who i think about all night
the reason i get up in the morning
but now your leaving without warning
i don't know what i will do with out you here
probably shed a tear
it's gonna make part of my heart dissapear
his beauty is so painful
i think i am in love with an angel
hes perfect in every way
i could stare at him all day
chorus
i wanna pour my soul out to him
even if i gotta go out on a limb
hes my true love
the one sent from the sky above
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Answers:
Honestly out of all the ones I have seen out there very well written!. the only thing I can say is only an opinion, because I do not know how the backing music goes or anything!. but with that said, the only improvement I have seen you could do is add some words and take some out to help make it flow better!. but like I said the music that is going through My head as I read it could be completely different (an uptempo 80's pop sound if you are wondering)!. all in all good!. just some tweaks here and there!.
Grade:high B+Www@Enter-QA@Com
Grade:high B+Www@Enter-QA@Com
As long as you got good instrumentals and vocals backin it up, you got one great song :)Www@Enter-QA@Com
wow you are really good!
i love itWww@Enter-QA@Com
i love itWww@Enter-QA@Com
It's pretty good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
It sounds good, but try broadening your horizons and write about something different!. 95% of songs out there are about love!. I understand that songwriting is all about your feelings and experiences and this may be what you are feeling and experiencing this particular moment, but face it, love is cliche!. I'm sure there's more to your world!. Otherwise, it's a pretty good song!.Www@Enter-QA@Com