What do you think of these three songs I wrote?!
Question: www.myspace.com/compasscharlatan
Is my voice too flat?
Lyrics ok?
Melody good?
thanks for listening
Answers: www.myspace.com/compasscharlatan
Is my voice too flat?
Lyrics ok?
Melody good?
thanks for listening
Wow. When I heard your voice, I thought you were Mike Ness from Social Distortion. That's what you sound like, if you don't know that band, check it out (though I'm assuming you do)
I like your voice. It has a lot of character. You should work on supporting it better - listen to when you are dropping off - work from your stomach. Also, your phrasing could use some work in certain parts. Beacuse of your unique voice, you can handle the sort of flatness (though it is NOT bad) and disorganization that you have. Just work on finding your strengths. You can do some really awesome stuff, if you strengthen your range and support the voice.
You need some other instruments, and I'd be impressed!
the lyrics...eh alright i like tht juliet part tht was prety good
i like the guitar tht was prety good...melody alright again
nd hmmmm the voice i think its a good start but some parts ur voice goes flat wen u need to be holdin a note. its a good start but needs some work.
7 Hills Of Rome: Voice flat, lyrics good, melody good
A Walk To Canossa: Voice flat, lyrics very good, melody good
Mussolini Street: Voice flat, lyrics good, melody good
To improve the melodies, you'll have to write a change bar between the verses. I wouldn't change the lyrics or melodies.
Time for voice lessons.
You have a really good idea going with the Seven Hills of Rome thing. But yeah, like the others say, something is wrong with the voice throughout. At some parts you sound like you aren't as confident. Like the part where you start "oh holy father are you listening...." and then "so tell (i don't know what you're saying after that but it's on the O vowel and that's where I really hear the quality of your singing go down)..." is pretty bad. I hear a great song here, just work more on your voice, confidence and what is this song about? I'm no history guy, so I don't know what the Seven Hills of Rome are all about, or did you make it up?