Comment on my lyric please!?!
Question: Im looking at you all day and night
Im trying to figure out a way to say that i'm sorryy
Whenever I see your smile
Tears run down my face
Now I feel all the pain
Ive caused you
And now I see all the shame iv'e done
Was it something I said or
Was it something I did?
I didn’t mean to break your heart
[1st verse]Im sry for the things ive said
Just like a child I lost my head
I should have known from the start
Id break ur heart
Im sorry for the things ive I done
I know that im the foolish one
Now that I see whos to blame
Im so ashamed
go back to 1st verse then read 2nd, 3rd
[verse2]Just give me a chance just one more chancee
Ill know that you’ll probably regret it
But you don't know yet
I've been waiting for the right time to talk to you
Oh to step up to the plate and bring myself to say
im sorry, im sorry
[3rd verse] Was it something I said or
Was it somthin I did?
I didn’t mean to break ur heart
but please wont you forgive me kimberly?
Answers: Im looking at you all day and night
Im trying to figure out a way to say that i'm sorryy
Whenever I see your smile
Tears run down my face
Now I feel all the pain
Ive caused you
And now I see all the shame iv'e done
Was it something I said or
Was it something I did?
I didn’t mean to break your heart
[1st verse]Im sry for the things ive said
Just like a child I lost my head
I should have known from the start
Id break ur heart
Im sorry for the things ive I done
I know that im the foolish one
Now that I see whos to blame
Im so ashamed
go back to 1st verse then read 2nd, 3rd
[verse2]Just give me a chance just one more chancee
Ill know that you’ll probably regret it
But you don't know yet
I've been waiting for the right time to talk to you
Oh to step up to the plate and bring myself to say
im sorry, im sorry
[3rd verse] Was it something I said or
Was it somthin I did?
I didn’t mean to break ur heart
but please wont you forgive me kimberly?
Very, very nice.
If I may
I look at you all day and night
Trying to find a way to say, sorry
I should have known just from the start
That someday I would break your heart
I'm sorry for the things I've done
I know that I'm the foolish one
Now that I see that I'm to blame
You know I feel so ashamed
[bridge]
Just give me a chance..one more chance,
I promise you won't regret it
I've been waitng for the time to talk to you,
Just to let it all out, and find the strength to say.
[chorus]
I'm sorry, sorry for the things I've done
So sorry,for what we have become
Was it something I said or was it something I did
I didn't mean to break you heart, Kimberly.
how sweet i hope she reads this how sweet it makes me wish i had a guy like that
its cute.
i like the story and meaning of the song. but you are tryin to make it rhyme. WELL DONT. i think it would be great as a rock song.
You have potential, you have alot feeling in your words,
You dont always have to rhyme.....
Try beating around the bush, a little more.....
tease the listener with different puns and metaphores,
AND MOST IMPORTANT!!!!!!!!
DON'T EVER POST YOUR LYRICS
all that is saying to me is......... "Im to shy to perform my lyrics to anyone in person"
AND LYRICS ARE ONLY AS GOOD AS YOUR DELIVERY!!!!!!!!