Is this poem good enough for a money contest?? PLEASE?!
Question: I don't know your intentions
or your deepest regrets,
the things that make you happy
and even upset.
But I do know your temperament,
hides your true intent.
You're a choleric, phoney,
and a hypocrite.
It didn't take long for me to see,
you were concieted and full of deceit.
I hope one day you'll realize,
how much more that you can be.
Just open up your eyes,
and ask God to help you see.
But don't feel alone,
I'm the same as you.
except I'm lost in the cold,
please don't pursue.
thx i'm 14
Answers: I don't know your intentions
or your deepest regrets,
the things that make you happy
and even upset.
But I do know your temperament,
hides your true intent.
You're a choleric, phoney,
and a hypocrite.
It didn't take long for me to see,
you were concieted and full of deceit.
I hope one day you'll realize,
how much more that you can be.
Just open up your eyes,
and ask God to help you see.
But don't feel alone,
I'm the same as you.
except I'm lost in the cold,
please don't pursue.
thx i'm 14
That is a brilliant poem for a 14yr old, I am very impressed. You can express yourself really well & you are very in touch with your emotions for your age. Your poem would also be excellent as song lyrics too! Good luck with the competition & keep writing, you really have a talent & you should pursue it. Well done!
That would make for a good song, I think. Might be a bit too pop-ish for my taste, but good nonetheless. I think if you threw a simple beat with it, something not too fast or too slow, would work well with it.
i like it. u may hv a chance. good luck tho^^
I don't see why people would be impressed because you're fourteen. I'm 15, and a lot of my friends have, no offense meant, wrote better poems. I at times have. When we were 14 too.
Here's a tip for money contests though. It's really cliche; write something happy. That throws them off.
Oh my gosh! That's REALLY good. I can really feel you. Well, I hope you win!