Lyrics good/bad?!
Question: are these lyrics good or bad. Comment please and i will give 10 points to the answer that helps me the most. also are these lyrics good enough to be submitted to some place?
LOVE SONG
This is a love song you here on the radio
This is a song to a girl that I know (2x)
She has long brown hair
and a beautiful smile.
She can make my day
even if it rains.
(chorus) This is a love song you her on the radio
This is a song to a girl that I know
She's a beautiful girl
the kind that every guy wants.
But she's mine all mine
and too good for me.
(chorus)
She's the girl of my dreams
The girl I know is the one
My heart beats fast
While her beautie is unsurpassed
(chorus) (2x)
Answers: are these lyrics good or bad. Comment please and i will give 10 points to the answer that helps me the most. also are these lyrics good enough to be submitted to some place?
LOVE SONG
This is a love song you here on the radio
This is a song to a girl that I know (2x)
She has long brown hair
and a beautiful smile.
She can make my day
even if it rains.
(chorus) This is a love song you her on the radio
This is a song to a girl that I know
She's a beautiful girl
the kind that every guy wants.
But she's mine all mine
and too good for me.
(chorus)
She's the girl of my dreams
The girl I know is the one
My heart beats fast
While her beautie is unsurpassed
(chorus) (2x)
it is not too bad:
I would try if you can to make the chorus just a little bit longer maybe. the first two lines are good and if you want to repeat them thats fine maybe put a couple more lines in between them.
also the verses are a little broad to me. add more details to them saying it is that she does that makes her perfect for you. i/e: going inot detail about why she is the one that every guy wants.
other then that it is good dont get me wrong. maybe if I knew the kind of beat behind it might give a different feel. it is good but needs work.
Grade: B/B-
Hopefully that helps. if not sorry.
I Wouldnt Say 'Amazing' But Theyre Ok
Sorry, If Theyre Your Own
God Bless
Lily =]
its ok i guess.... but there arent many words in.... it would be better if there were more things to say in the song..... and at least something that rhymes (although its not necessary)... i think it would be better ^_^
well i like the song. i mean i like that it has potentional. i would change" this a love song you here on the radio and while her beaute is unsurpassed". not they suck, they just dont have enough spark and that she can make my day even if it rains sound like i have heard it before. ova all its good its just not believable. i feel like ur writing about it but u havent lived it .
they're okay...not absolutly the best but its good