My friend is a songwriter and she wont believe me when i tel her what i think of!
Question: giv ur advice?
1
I see your face
I look in your eyes
and I don't wanna be anywhere but here.
No matter what
No matter where
I know you’ll always be there
to help me past these hard times
when I struggle to get through
and then there’s you.
2
I'm left here, stranded on my own
u've left me, sittin all alone
And I'll never forgive u
for all those things u do
that hurt me so badly
you've left me, stranded on my own yea
you've left me, sittin all alone yea
thinking about
everything, everything you've done to me
you've cheated, left me, and ripped my heart in two
now i'll never no never forgive u
never, never
And the next time I see ur face
i wont
the next time u try to talk to me
it'll sound like the rush of the wind, blowin away
all those words u say
Cause I never forgave u
u hurt me so bad
it's inexcusable
I know u didn't care back then
but now ur feelin the guilt
now u kno wat its like to be stranded by the one u love.. yea yea ooh
Answers: giv ur advice?
1
I see your face
I look in your eyes
and I don't wanna be anywhere but here.
No matter what
No matter where
I know you’ll always be there
to help me past these hard times
when I struggle to get through
and then there’s you.
2
I'm left here, stranded on my own
u've left me, sittin all alone
And I'll never forgive u
for all those things u do
that hurt me so badly
you've left me, stranded on my own yea
you've left me, sittin all alone yea
thinking about
everything, everything you've done to me
you've cheated, left me, and ripped my heart in two
now i'll never no never forgive u
never, never
And the next time I see ur face
i wont
the next time u try to talk to me
it'll sound like the rush of the wind, blowin away
all those words u say
Cause I never forgave u
u hurt me so bad
it's inexcusable
I know u didn't care back then
but now ur feelin the guilt
now u kno wat its like to be stranded by the one u love.. yea yea ooh
I love the messages and the content. I think most songs should have a chorus section though...I think you could take a section that is already there and just repeat it at two other points in order to evenly break up the song. I really don't know anything about writting music though, so don't take my opion harshly. I do love what you have so far though!!
touching and warming. very very very nice tell her
they're pretty good:)