Do u like my song/poem?!
Question: It's called Breaking Me
Burnin black roses on my doorstep when youre here
Broken hearts when youre gone
I love you
But youre killin me with your words that mean so much
To many fights
And now youre leavin
But you know
Id rather you cut my wrists than break my heart
And leave me here cry
Your soul is so dark
What a waste of time
Me and you
Answers: It's called Breaking Me
Burnin black roses on my doorstep when youre here
Broken hearts when youre gone
I love you
But youre killin me with your words that mean so much
To many fights
And now youre leavin
But you know
Id rather you cut my wrists than break my heart
And leave me here cry
Your soul is so dark
What a waste of time
Me and you
WOW What an intense song! Your Good I have to admit. Made me cry a little.
that really depresses me.
but its okay.
No
That was good- but a little depressing.
YES
Kind of emo.
It's alright.
Not pro-material though.
sounds pretty deep i hope it's not too personal. I like it i appreciate all art that people have to contribute in society
i like it
pretty good but i would like to suggest, taking out the I love you, it doesnt fit very well.
hmm, very nice words, but it doesn't ryhm?
i like it
i think it should be a song
but...
the song sounds like something my chemical romance would song
i like them though
anyway
nice song/poem
scary but i liked it pretty good.
You definitely have a way with words. The poem is a little scary but I like the way it is put together. If it has meaning to you then thats what is important. It does sound good, but creepy.
I guess it's good =\
EDIT: Where the hell are people getting the idea that a poem has to rhyme? And try to spell RHYME correctly.
some of it didn't make sense, and if it's a poem, it didn't ryme at all. SORRY !
Umm its a little dark. And it dosent rhyme and umm not my kinda song or anything. But i think it has meaning behind iit which is good.
It's o.k., in a torn, unsure, need to move on kinda way
thats awesome
That cut my wrists part is a bit too much. I like the first part 'Burning black..till.. you're leaving'.
By the way, poems don't have to rhyme people.
you might want to work on meter because you have it throughout most of the poem/song but in other areas you dont and i used to have this problem but i've won awards for this kind of stuff so you can ask me about this kinda stuff if you want to
Try this,
As Salaam Alaikum
Walaikum As Salaam
Dis how we do it
Doin’ ibaada subha and shaam
Allah Subhana Wata’ala
To only u we do dua’a
And say ‘La illaha illallah’
That there is no god but Allah
Ya Ghafur ur Raheem
You sent us the seal of the prophets
He told us to follow ur deen
And made us the chosen ummah
And called us Muslimeen
Ya allah, keep us on the straight path
And not one of the kafireen
Ameen…
No. That was totally depressing.
Very very dark
are you writing this to your ex-girlfriend ?
sounds like it. (not in a bad way) its a good poem, very emotional.
yes i like it but it's kind of depressing
it is very depressing but if that is how you are feeling it is great because most people do not know how to express them selfs through words. share this poems with your loved ones they will enjoy it.
i like it but except for when you said i rather you cut your wrists than break my heart that was a bit violent i like your title though see ya later
i love it!!!! simply amazing. =) keep up the good work. i'm looking forward to cing more poems/songs by you.
tell me, who's your biggest influence here?
i think it's just messed up, in my opinion.
Yes, I sang it to the tune of Ernie the Fastest Milkman in the West and it sounded great!
=) Wtf was that?
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