Is the song i wrote good or not??!
Question: some critiques needed please...tell me the truth:
*it's only the beginning just so you can get the feel of it
[verse 1]
Your stare grabs my heart
Picks it Up and throws it away
I dont even want to start
describing the way(the way)
You've got me in this trench
of your love.
[Chorus]
So take my soul
twist and turn it(not changing)
You can take my heart
but please don't break it(no breaking)
I've fallen so far so fast
like never before
like never before.
Answers: some critiques needed please...tell me the truth:
*it's only the beginning just so you can get the feel of it
[verse 1]
Your stare grabs my heart
Picks it Up and throws it away
I dont even want to start
describing the way(the way)
You've got me in this trench
of your love.
[Chorus]
So take my soul
twist and turn it(not changing)
You can take my heart
but please don't break it(no breaking)
I've fallen so far so fast
like never before
like never before.
i think youve got a good start
it sounds catchy
maybe make it deeper and more complex to make you think and more original phrases
but pretty cool
i like it, do you have a band or something?
i like the lyrics and you have got a great voice! wOw!
It's alright.