RHH... feedback on the verse... My Love?!


Question: when it comes to love i get a little carried away
like a pallbearers job with a smile on my face
cause... i wear my heart on my sleeve like a brace
and put every-thing-in like a heavy suitcase
i know a lot people tell me its bad
but they havent seen the things i have
like they never really stepped foot in my pad
when they see me out with her they react like they mad
but
i dont pay attention like the back of the class
cause my thoughts are too affixed on the back of that ***
i mean dont get it twisted yes.. im still a man but
i put down the bitches so i could pick a fam up
now i overstand plus i get what they sayin
when they say "you get every-thing you need start prayin"
so
i kneel on down just to A my Man up
stand up like a joke in time to put my hands up
to reach out and touch you like a phone plan cause
im crazy over youuuuuu like a soldier boy fan, what?
i can understand if you get a little nervous but
when i see your eyes love i know God heard us
YUP!


Answers: when it comes to love i get a little carried away
like a pallbearers job with a smile on my face
cause... i wear my heart on my sleeve like a brace
and put every-thing-in like a heavy suitcase
i know a lot people tell me its bad
but they havent seen the things i have
like they never really stepped foot in my pad
when they see me out with her they react like they mad
but
i dont pay attention like the back of the class
cause my thoughts are too affixed on the back of that ***
i mean dont get it twisted yes.. im still a man but
i put down the bitches so i could pick a fam up
now i overstand plus i get what they sayin
when they say "you get every-thing you need start prayin"
so
i kneel on down just to A my Man up
stand up like a joke in time to put my hands up
to reach out and touch you like a phone plan cause
im crazy over youuuuuu like a soldier boy fan, what?
i can understand if you get a little nervous but
when i see your eyes love i know God heard us
YUP!

Hell wat people hav 2 say bout anything_it's ur B.I & plus a person can't learn a leason unitl it's tought

its already in a song.. i just wanted feedback Report It


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  • rick s's Avatar by rick s
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    April 03, 2007
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  • let's see: lame imagery. trite concepts...been done a million times before. really, really boring and uninteresting

    u're not good at this, either.

    rick s really needs to shut up, cuz i love it. its real good, dotn let people put u down ever, they jsut hatin cuz they cant do wat u do.

    you've earned a star!

    I got a song coming up soon. Gotta defend my crown.

    u started off really strong...a few overly used metaphors...but other than that it was tight....



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