What do you think of the lyrics of this song i just made?!
Question: A crush seems like hatred compared to how i feel
he's the reason i wake in the morning,
but then i wonder if it's real
my mind knows it'll never happen,
but my heart wont let it go
some times i just sit there and wonder;
wonder if he'll ever know
then an empty feeling arrises,
but your smile fills it whole.
With joy and peace and love
moodswings take my soul
Answers: A crush seems like hatred compared to how i feel
he's the reason i wake in the morning,
but then i wonder if it's real
my mind knows it'll never happen,
but my heart wont let it go
some times i just sit there and wonder;
wonder if he'll ever know
then an empty feeling arrises,
but your smile fills it whole.
With joy and peace and love
moodswings take my soul
Good base branch out ideas
Why does it feel like hatred
What are the reasons your mind tells you it won't happen
What shows you he doesn't know you like him
one of my english teachers told me if you want to make others feel what you are feeling in writting explain using all five senses how you feel.
This really helps when you get writers block too.
what do you dream about at night
It sux......keep trying.
great!
I like them alot you should definetly keep writing.
Thats really nice... keep working on it?
that is beautiful. very touching.
Beautiful. Good job. =)
Be careful putting it on sites like this though.
I love it, but I don't understand the 1st line...what does that mean???
they are good, but it seems like you try to hard to ryme.
I think its really good, i would probably buy the song!
It's a really good poem, but it doesn't seem too songish....
I really like it!!
great start, wish i could hear the melody...
its ok
Its okay but you need to add a little. Is this about some one special? :D
It is kinda nice. But I advice that you put a bit of rhyming words in it.
the first 2 sections sound great...the 3rd needs a little work
keep going!!
I think they're pretty sweet, except for the 'joy and peace and love' part. A little too cotton candy for me. But that's just me.
Sweet! All you need to work on is getting the number of syllables in the lines to match...and it'll be perfect!
very nice.....
i love it, who ever says is bad is a motherfucker
it's okay but too straightforward.
make it a little deeper.
use literary devices! (hyperboles, metaphors, allusions...)
and give it meaning :)
i think its good, but i just hope ppl will realize life isnt always about LOVE, urgggg
*gasp*
Nice Job
Keep writing
"my heart wont let it go" <--------awesome
http://ca.youtube.com/watch?v=eaMXNtuaq3...
lets just say that u dont have to worry about anyone stealing it
Thats good:)
I like it........
Very moving
Keep writing songs i want more!