What do u think of these lyrics i wrote?!
Question: ok so its still being fixed but this is what it is like rite now..
That Girl is Dark
refrain: I cant believe u were that way w/her.i wish i could erase those memories that that girl. she tortured me by makin my life hell until one day i turned around and ended up in that dark corner of hers.
verse1: i cant believe u let her make me dark and gloomy. i lost my friends because of that girl. i was best friends with you who was out with him.
refrain: I cant believe u were that way w/her.i wish i could erase those memories that that girl. she tortured me by makin my life hell until one day i turned around and ended up in that dark corner of hers.
verse2: i was that way till i noticed you wouldnt give up on me until i finally found the light and was scared to leave for you. you stood next to me until i was brave enough to walk on my own.no matter what i did you would get me out of it until i found the light.
refrain 2 times....with the last word 2nd time held
Answers: ok so its still being fixed but this is what it is like rite now..
That Girl is Dark
refrain: I cant believe u were that way w/her.i wish i could erase those memories that that girl. she tortured me by makin my life hell until one day i turned around and ended up in that dark corner of hers.
verse1: i cant believe u let her make me dark and gloomy. i lost my friends because of that girl. i was best friends with you who was out with him.
refrain: I cant believe u were that way w/her.i wish i could erase those memories that that girl. she tortured me by makin my life hell until one day i turned around and ended up in that dark corner of hers.
verse2: i was that way till i noticed you wouldnt give up on me until i finally found the light and was scared to leave for you. you stood next to me until i was brave enough to walk on my own.no matter what i did you would get me out of it until i found the light.
refrain 2 times....with the last word 2nd time held
I like it! how old are you? I really like the part that goes "i turned around and ended up in that dark corner of hers"
Yeah, some parts of it need to be reworked, but it's got real potential. :)
I think they need work. I also think the verses are too short. But if they're going to be that quality... I think it's better that they're short.
thats realy good keep writing!!!!!!
forever,
ciara