What do think about this stupid rap i made up?!
Question: verse 1: yo, yo, A yo I'm a street talking negro that dont care about my ego,i'm just an ordinary person like any other people,were all equal,i'm not feeble,and i'm not weak,but i can speak for my own zero,words that i say,but it aint no word play,but i can write it like every day,no vocab skill,but i write this in my own way,so no i'm not e-40 and i'm not from the bay,but i make you go crazey and make you say,oh yae,
i'm just a little kid that will take a shot at the game,but they may think i sound like a ------,a little lame,but i'm not soulja boy cuz i don't care for the fame,but like hurricane because i need a big big bank,but if i suck my skill,im gonna spill,and they gonna say that i'm a fake,but i'm now in session and i know i'm not too late for a lesson,but i gotta lot of passion for my talent,oh the people can relate to,i'm kinda cool but i'm not a fool,for a lesson,i only say my rhymes for the lyrical expression, but not impressions,oh it's a blessing,that im still living,thats why i'm writing the the rhymes that i'm am giving,i'm not a explicit writer and i got intellegence,but,but,but,but i stay so relevant
Verse 2: I wish i was this or i wish i was that,i wish i was skinny and not so fat or wack ,ha ha,thats kinda funny even tho im not a dummy,but if i was'nt living then i would probrably be a mummy,but if i was walking from the dead i would probrably be a zombie!,or probrably chilling at some place or hiding at a lobby,''a yo i'm kinda sloppy'',when it's comes to rap game,im tryning to maintain,and see yo i'm tryna to use my own pink brain,but then im gonna change,if i'm feeling kinda of stuck,theres no such thang about a history of luck,but yo i just found 54 bucks,while i was riding inside my car,i didnt even think i can make this f****** far,i couldn't exist even if i was a retard,but if i was a rap stone,then i could be hard,like a great musician for more compitition,less talking,and people should need more listening,and i dont need a pole cause i aint going fishing,cause if i miss aim then maybe i'm missin,no need for permission,to pass my own mission,i got intellegence,but but,but,but istay so relevant
I can never lose my intellegence,but i need to stay relevant,i will never ever burn my intellegence or never melt it,i always felt that something needs to be relevant,and or important so i looked for it,and that is my intellegence
Answers: verse 1: yo, yo, A yo I'm a street talking negro that dont care about my ego,i'm just an ordinary person like any other people,were all equal,i'm not feeble,and i'm not weak,but i can speak for my own zero,words that i say,but it aint no word play,but i can write it like every day,no vocab skill,but i write this in my own way,so no i'm not e-40 and i'm not from the bay,but i make you go crazey and make you say,oh yae,
i'm just a little kid that will take a shot at the game,but they may think i sound like a ------,a little lame,but i'm not soulja boy cuz i don't care for the fame,but like hurricane because i need a big big bank,but if i suck my skill,im gonna spill,and they gonna say that i'm a fake,but i'm now in session and i know i'm not too late for a lesson,but i gotta lot of passion for my talent,oh the people can relate to,i'm kinda cool but i'm not a fool,for a lesson,i only say my rhymes for the lyrical expression, but not impressions,oh it's a blessing,that im still living,thats why i'm writing the the rhymes that i'm am giving,i'm not a explicit writer and i got intellegence,but,but,but,but i stay so relevant
Verse 2: I wish i was this or i wish i was that,i wish i was skinny and not so fat or wack ,ha ha,thats kinda funny even tho im not a dummy,but if i was'nt living then i would probrably be a mummy,but if i was walking from the dead i would probrably be a zombie!,or probrably chilling at some place or hiding at a lobby,''a yo i'm kinda sloppy'',when it's comes to rap game,im tryning to maintain,and see yo i'm tryna to use my own pink brain,but then im gonna change,if i'm feeling kinda of stuck,theres no such thang about a history of luck,but yo i just found 54 bucks,while i was riding inside my car,i didnt even think i can make this f****** far,i couldn't exist even if i was a retard,but if i was a rap stone,then i could be hard,like a great musician for more compitition,less talking,and people should need more listening,and i dont need a pole cause i aint going fishing,cause if i miss aim then maybe i'm missin,no need for permission,to pass my own mission,i got intellegence,but but,but,but istay so relevant
I can never lose my intellegence,but i need to stay relevant,i will never ever burn my intellegence or never melt it,i always felt that something needs to be relevant,and or important so i looked for it,and that is my intellegence
damn ur worse than lil wayne
Wow i wish i could write stuff like this!! Great
pretty simple rhyme Sceme..
but it was still pretty good
sounds good.. very positive but way tooooo rhymey. I like it still because of the message.
i think its iight
ur right stupid
You should get a good beat (original or not) and record it, and good thing you doing conscious rap and not some of the **** you here today. If you really go through with it, you should put it on www.dopetracks.com it as a whole bunch of amateur rappers and producer display their. You should go there if you want more feedback.
I'm not a rapper, but I know good lyrics when I see it.
really u need a better flow good choice of words and i like that u not lyin but trust me rap is really what u bout and aint scared to do it dont matter if u did it before its all about what u bout doin if it comes down to it trust me im the voice of my city
go check it out and tell me what u think bout this music
myspace.com/datownsrealest
I think you answered your own question. It's stupid.