Do you think these are good lyrics for my new song?!
Question: I've worked really hard on thinking of this song. Please don't give me a yes or no answer, seriously give me your opinion.
These are just words I will put in the song, they aren't in order like Verse 1 first, then the refrain, then so on... they are just parts of the song...
The song is called Black and White Rainbows. Here is goes:
What happens after you find the empty pot of gold at the end of the black and white rainbows?
What happens after the last chance?
When you wake up from that crazy dream when life isn't always what it seems.
You realize your thinkin' negitive, when you can be so positive, so turn the darkness into light, and remember that night when you thought you were gonna lose the battle agaist yourself, but your still here.
Answers: I've worked really hard on thinking of this song. Please don't give me a yes or no answer, seriously give me your opinion.
These are just words I will put in the song, they aren't in order like Verse 1 first, then the refrain, then so on... they are just parts of the song...
The song is called Black and White Rainbows. Here is goes:
What happens after you find the empty pot of gold at the end of the black and white rainbows?
What happens after the last chance?
When you wake up from that crazy dream when life isn't always what it seems.
You realize your thinkin' negitive, when you can be so positive, so turn the darkness into light, and remember that night when you thought you were gonna lose the battle agaist yourself, but your still here.
Better than the other stuff I have read on here! (and I have read a lot!) This defently tells a story. It's poetry. That's what music is, is poetry. But remember when you are writing to your audience, make sure what you are writing comes from deep down inside you; that's where all the best stuff is from! Pretend like you aren't writing a song when you are writing, pretend like you are writing a poem that you have to read to the world and it has to tell a story, but in your story it can't 'give' away what you are talking about. People like to figure out what the song is about on there own, not the singer specfically telling them what the song is about in the song. No one likes that...
Good luck with you're writing!
Your off to a good start! =]
its ok.....
i think it would be better if you asked this question, with it all finished and in order....then it might make more sense, and be able to give a better opinion.
yeah their okay but you'll need a good beat.
no offense or anything but I' dont think that they are that true. like i meantheres supposed to be some deeper meaning but i cant c it
That is a great song just try to make the layrics shorter
yes i like that . It's really unique and hip. It diffrent. and if it expresses how you feel two thumbs up. But i dont think you should post what you write. Some body else coulde easily take it and sing it as if they made it up. And they'll get the props and not YOU. =]
I like it and well it kind of tells a story but try not to make a certain lyric to long or too short and you could probably add somethign like a chorus or something like "what happened to those black rainbows i saw overhead what happened to the battle of light that i thought i would dread ohh what happened to this whole world,what am looking at, I think its something... a white rainbowwwwwww. Hope i helped you and im not good at making songs so i hope u like it.
your lyrics are great! your last part is really long though... maybe you can break it up into smaller bits... i think your song will be very nice =) good luck!
I think that the sentences are too long shorten them with paint a picture with your words. Hope this helps. Good luck =)
i think they are great lyrics and easy to remember so if u do publish it ppl could sing along! i though of new lyrics to go along with it...not going to post tho
uhhh... its good but a little to wordy you need to change the first sentance, you need a really catchy beat and good vochls
Its a great song but in some verses just try to make it shorter like in the lat one Other than that its great!
it ok...