A song i wrote?!
Question: what do you think of this song? please be honest and tell me what you think...
thanks..
Loneliness often is the only place I can fit
Between the lines I often sit
Loneliness often is so comfortable
An old friend that I know so well
(Chorus)
If life was truly black and white
Maybe the confusion in me would not stay
But colour complicates all these things
Destroys a work of art that lies in simplicity
True beauty could that never gets a chance to exists
Loneliness often is
The only thing that people can understand
A currency that has no base
Yet is freely exchanged between desperate hands
(chrous)
A war ground is all I can see
The comfort that soon abandons me
All the things that I despise
Lies behind my own cursed eyes
chorus
Answers: what do you think of this song? please be honest and tell me what you think...
thanks..
Loneliness often is the only place I can fit
Between the lines I often sit
Loneliness often is so comfortable
An old friend that I know so well
(Chorus)
If life was truly black and white
Maybe the confusion in me would not stay
But colour complicates all these things
Destroys a work of art that lies in simplicity
True beauty could that never gets a chance to exists
Loneliness often is
The only thing that people can understand
A currency that has no base
Yet is freely exchanged between desperate hands
(chrous)
A war ground is all I can see
The comfort that soon abandons me
All the things that I despise
Lies behind my own cursed eyes
chorus
I like it. Very poetic, an interesting allegory to the bittersweet rewards of being alone: one is rewarded in that there is nobody to disturb, one can gain solitude, yet one is harmed by the fact that the absence of contact and communication brings depression and darkness.
Keep writing!
i like the lyrics :]
its great!
but plzzzzzzz take it off b4 someone steals it!
sad but true=(
its good but kinda depressing
Thats quite nice actually..
emo...
That was touching have you ever thought of going into the music recording business?
like the lyrics but meant for girls gay.
i like the lyrics :D
but id have to hear it to be sure hah
daaayyuum boy that was freaking gorgeous! i would ttly listen to it ??
happy new year! pce ninja haha.
depressings makes me wanna slit my wrists lol
kinda emo. but usually, songs with that kind of emotion will go far. like OneRepublic's "Apologize". just keep writing songs and you'll come up with a chart topper. :)
seems more like a poem then a song
good...........i like it!! but u should find a good like ummm beat rytham....to sing it to dont ruin it
i really like it!
if you ever put it to a melody and put up a video on youtube, send me a link! :)
bravo. You should put on the tune with it.
are u ok? i like the song! but what the other person said take it off before someone steals it :)
very gd
its ok but it would be better if i knew how the beat went or how it sounds with music
Thats really good. I can relate... but i can only do short poems, not songs. Be careful or somone may take it.
in comparing and reading the first and second versus' first lines... there's not match, no rhythm. the lyrics are great, i just can't find a beat to it.
"Loneliness often is the only place I can fit"
and
"Loneliness often is"
kinda leaves me hangin there. otherwise, find a nice pause in line two of verse two, and move it to line one, to match line 1 in verse 1's rhythm
otherwise, it is really good
I absolutely loved it! But you really shoud be careful so that no one steals it......that would suck. But honestly? I'd have to hear it put to music to truly appreciate it. Its really hard to catch the meaning without the mood of the music.
Do you feel the hurt in the world? Yours lyrics suggest that you are a sensitive soul. Keep writing my darlin' you have an inner vision x
good but I would love to hear it!
The Lyrics Are Terrific, The Sound, it feels like I can sing along, add the melody into my head and never forget it. Its amazing (:
wow. that was good. alittle depressing... but i guess that is the point of this song!
I can`t seem to scan it as a song but i think it would make an excellent poem.
I think you have talent but if this comes from the heart you should lighten up a bit and see the brighter side of life.
People in this country are generally downcast due to all the outside influences that affect them.
Try cheering them up with your next composition.
Wow, that's really good!
kinda emo, but its good
Wow, that was really nice and good! You should put it on "Youtube" Hey and if you do send a link of it okay.
That was the BEST song everrr Go on xfacta '08 and say u wrote it ur self!!! and its called Loniless!!!
pretty gay