WHAT DO u THINK BOUT MY LYRICS SO FAR?!
Question: ITS NOT DONE YET
AND ITS SOMETHING DIFFERENT
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I'm running away
My boots are going through the winter snow
I don't have anywhere to go
I wake up the snow has melted
and the sun is rising
I'm under the tall tree
with it leaves planted over me
playing my guiatar
and theres know one from afar
I start singing
My foot starts tapping to the beat
and eventuly my secrets are becoming a melody
Oh what calamity
I wake up and the sun is rising
I'm under the tall tree
with its leaves planted over me
playing my guitar
and theres know from afar
Its just me and my guitar
Its just me and my guitar
Ya its just me and my guitar
Answers: ITS NOT DONE YET
AND ITS SOMETHING DIFFERENT
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I'm running away
My boots are going through the winter snow
I don't have anywhere to go
I wake up the snow has melted
and the sun is rising
I'm under the tall tree
with it leaves planted over me
playing my guiatar
and theres know one from afar
I start singing
My foot starts tapping to the beat
and eventuly my secrets are becoming a melody
Oh what calamity
I wake up and the sun is rising
I'm under the tall tree
with its leaves planted over me
playing my guitar
and theres know from afar
Its just me and my guitar
Its just me and my guitar
Ya its just me and my guitar
its really cute! i loves the part about "i wake up and the snow has melted" and "my secrets become a melody" and the intro!
<3 its great!!!
could you please review my song???
THANK YOUUU! =D
<3Rhyyain
1) Spell check.
2) Try to find a way to take the "I"s out and still talk in first person. Too much pointing at yourself results in the audience being less able to substitute themselves into your position for understanding.
3) The line "and there's know from afar" is confusing. Is it and there's nothing from afar? No one to hear? Knowledge from afar?
4) You wake up and the sun is rising, then somehow you are playing guitar. Did you sleep outside under the tall tree? Or did you go out immediately after waking up?
4) My boots shuffle through the winter snow.