Please Rate & Edit A SMALL Porton Of My Song (7 Lines) and please tell me how I !
Question: I am a 15 year old Boy just so you know and Please Go As Harsh As You Can Go, Edit and rate out of 10 please My 2nd Song Ever:
Song (About A Crush):
Needed some time to chill so I went to the mall
Seeing you there, dont know your name
Didn't have the guts to talk to you there
Picturing you with me everywhere
Trying to get yo attention
Just look at me once so I can get the relaxin
Answers: I am a 15 year old Boy just so you know and Please Go As Harsh As You Can Go, Edit and rate out of 10 please My 2nd Song Ever:
Song (About A Crush):
Needed some time to chill so I went to the mall
Seeing you there, dont know your name
Didn't have the guts to talk to you there
Picturing you with me everywhere
Trying to get yo attention
Just look at me once so I can get the relaxin
It's getting there but it's too 'in your face' like you literally spelling out what happened. Try and use more subtle language so that it doesn't seem so obvious.
Good try though(: