Check out these lyrics I wrote?!
Question: You are sitting on the couch
Watchin’ late night movies (phone in hand)
He’s been a little crazy
You’ve been a little moody.
It doesn’t mean that you don’t’ love him,
You just aren’t sure what to do.
To return the careful favor,
Oh, I’d be the first
To tell you that
“love is overrated,
He’ll take your heart
And separate it,”
But somehow I think you speak truth,
And remember that I (I, I ,I)
Don’t want to see you cry,
Because I know it feels
To be on the other side.
And girl let me tell you
That the grass isn’t always greener
Oh, on one side it is much clearer?
Can you see?
How is heart beats for you,
Time can’t change that mood.
Woah, oh oh oh oh.
And remember that I (I, I, I)
Don’t want to see you cry
Because I know how it feels
To be on the other side
Of this feeble telephone line
Don’t cry,
I won’t watch your spirit die
You can make it out alive
If you don’t let it fly away,
Tonight.
Remember that I, I, I
Don’t want to see you cry
Won’t watch your spirit die,
His heart is beating for you,
Don’t forget that,
Don’t regret that.
But Don’t let if fly awa-ay.
No, Oh oh.
Don’t let, it go.
Answers: You are sitting on the couch
Watchin’ late night movies (phone in hand)
He’s been a little crazy
You’ve been a little moody.
It doesn’t mean that you don’t’ love him,
You just aren’t sure what to do.
To return the careful favor,
Oh, I’d be the first
To tell you that
“love is overrated,
He’ll take your heart
And separate it,”
But somehow I think you speak truth,
And remember that I (I, I ,I)
Don’t want to see you cry,
Because I know it feels
To be on the other side.
And girl let me tell you
That the grass isn’t always greener
Oh, on one side it is much clearer?
Can you see?
How is heart beats for you,
Time can’t change that mood.
Woah, oh oh oh oh.
And remember that I (I, I, I)
Don’t want to see you cry
Because I know how it feels
To be on the other side
Of this feeble telephone line
Don’t cry,
I won’t watch your spirit die
You can make it out alive
If you don’t let it fly away,
Tonight.
Remember that I, I, I
Don’t want to see you cry
Won’t watch your spirit die,
His heart is beating for you,
Don’t forget that,
Don’t regret that.
But Don’t let if fly awa-ay.
No, Oh oh.
Don’t let, it go.
I think it was fairly catchy.
I don't know if you copied it from a file you already have on your computer or if you just typed it all out here... but if it's saved on your computer this way you should edit ....
And girl let me tell you
That the grass isn’t always greener
Oh, on one side it is much clearer?
Can you see?
How (H)is heart beats for you,
Time can’t change that mood.
Woah, oh oh oh oh.
Personally, I would try to visualize either yourself or a famous singer singing it and then look over the lyrics. When I do that in my head i'm seeing Mary J. Blidge with kinda a raspy hip/hop vibe. I don't know that it would sound that great as a rock song? If this is a rough draft... then you're definitely on the right track! If not, i'd take another look at it trying to visualize someone else singing it. It tends to help me? Hopefully my tid-bit is of some use to you. Good luck and keep it up!
it sounds great!! i love the lyrics. ur so talented!!
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These are REALLY good, I write lyrics myself.
I always have the beat going in my head and when I show people, it throws them off, haha.
looks cool, but don't post your lyrics on the internet unless you've already copyrighted them because someone could steal them
Sounds like teeny bopper stuff. What are you going to do with it, now you've posted it someone can steal it and sell it as their own.
thats really good
Would make a good rap song.
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Awesome. While I was reading it, I thought it would sound really good as a rock song.
I think you have stolen various quotes from various songs and put them together in this one.
beautiful i loved it! :]
its ok but i wouldnt have posted it online... some singer can use these lyrics
um well whats the melody
its awesome
sounds nice, but u should focus more on more constant rhyming! u have no pattern
nice, for classical rock
cheesssssssy.
heard it about a thousand times before.. but you got the right idea. start over. practice makes perfect!
I thought it sounded pretty good. Writing lyrics are harder than you'd think.
ya there good do you have some music if not you should put some
i reallli lik those lyrics...it sounds lik a good song. good job
I think they are good but some of the parts do not ryhme and you need a chorus.But on the other hand great job!
ya there real real good!!!
I thought it was really good. I've never heard lyrics like that before :)
im guessing your around 12 years old. im pretty sure everything you said has already been said in thousands of awful pop songs. its bad, real bad.
I really like it
That is great! put some music to it and I'd love to hear it!!
gurl u have talent alot of it to! if i knew you i would say send me these lyrics and music and i could sing them for you and probably get them known! and even put on the radio!
Not bad. Depending on the music, a few bits could change..but how many songs have we all said that about?
Good luck with this! =)
The last two verses are the best.
I hope you are well, and your friends.. =)
Luck to you
Reft~Tackarii
Looks great so far! Being a song writer myself, I find that i am usually quite picky. I see some things that I myself would change, but hey - it's your song! lol. As long as it sounds good to you, then it's great! ^^ Hope your day treats you well!
-Evelyn
EDIT: I MUST agree with some of the other people who have answered this question. You shouldn't post lyrics like this online. A lot of people these days like to steal others work, and claim it as their own! Don't let that happen to you!
Not bad...
Silje Nergaard - I Don't Want To See You Cry : .
I don't want to see you cry
I beg you try
Not to let the pain I'm causing reach your eyes
I don't want to see you cry
Aim your words like spears
Don't break me up by breaking down in tears
Are you some sort of famous singer/song writer with a fake yahoo account trying to get opinions on your new song coming out?
Well I can't stop singing it. =D
In fact, I love it. And I'm gonna give you a star, because you deserve it.
<3
Why you giving people thumb downs? ='(
Meany.