What do you think about these lyrics...?!
Question: please scale 1-10
revise/add any verses
or suggestions
[verse 1]
I’m
I’m sorry
I’m sorry I made an error
The terror
Of my life now
I cant live without you
[bridge]
Youre existence
Keeps me breathing
But now Im suffocating
[chorus]
Im suffocating
Don’t close the door
One chance, one more
This misery, this mess
All of this stress
[verse 2]
You’re slowly killing me
Murder is on the block
The darkness trembles me
Slowly around the clock
forgive me, save me
[guitar solo]
[verse 3]
my heart is lethargic
lethargic is my heart
[bridge]
Youre existence
Keeps me breathing
But now Im suffocating
[chorus]
Im suffocating
Don’t close the door
One chance, one more
This misery, this mess
All of this stress
[chorus]
Im suffocating
Don’t close the door
One chance, one more
This misery, this mess
All of this stress
Answers: please scale 1-10
revise/add any verses
or suggestions
[verse 1]
I’m
I’m sorry
I’m sorry I made an error
The terror
Of my life now
I cant live without you
[bridge]
Youre existence
Keeps me breathing
But now Im suffocating
[chorus]
Im suffocating
Don’t close the door
One chance, one more
This misery, this mess
All of this stress
[verse 2]
You’re slowly killing me
Murder is on the block
The darkness trembles me
Slowly around the clock
forgive me, save me
[guitar solo]
[verse 3]
my heart is lethargic
lethargic is my heart
[bridge]
Youre existence
Keeps me breathing
But now Im suffocating
[chorus]
Im suffocating
Don’t close the door
One chance, one more
This misery, this mess
All of this stress
[chorus]
Im suffocating
Don’t close the door
One chance, one more
This misery, this mess
All of this stress
cool it sounds good! add a non rhyming word at the bridge. it will sound better. it kinda sounds like a song Panic! at the disco" would write! good job rated 8
i rate it a 7. not that good, not that bad
lmao
sounds horrible on paper
i'd have to hear it
I can relate to it.. I broke up with a boyfriend before for pretty muhc nothing and i acted very mean to him.. and i realized i loved him and needed him.. I made a mistake and id do ANYTHING for a second chance..but he cut me off..took me 2 years to heal
that is a good song..=] did ya write it?